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Abyss

Can you remember the days
When a simple smile
Meant so much
Or do you still?
I'm not so sure,
So let me remind you
Of those days
When everything meant something
And nothing was just a little piece of everything
Those days...
Where love was returned
To you twofold
Where it now always seems
So unrequited

As you hang now above the abyss of lost will-
To live, to love, to believe
A hand will reach for you
When that hand comes,
You will remember-
And you will know what I mean.

Author notes

I really hope this helps, I can only begin to grasp the situation you're in right now. (seeing that I'm just 12)

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  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    February 9, 2008

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    This is a beautiful write. Everyone needs to know they have at least one person to reach out to. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Ronaline
    November 7, 2007
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    This is beautiful. I came across it when browsing. And I fell in love with it. Beautiful write.


  • riasme
    November 6, 2007

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    wonderfully wonderful and soooo true!! Smeegul is giving you cheerios for this. *talks more like gollum*


    • DeadlyTurnip
      November 6, 2007
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      Hooray for gollum!!


      • tsarina
        November 7, 2007
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        smeegol is how you spell it , fat hobbitses! *sheesh* i like it, it flows really well. the last line really sumsit up and it's really nice

        cheerios!
        ♥ sasha ♥


  • grace elizabeth
    November 6, 2007

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    i really like the sound of this poem. the way it flows off my lips. the last few lines were really good.

  • Hypocritical Oath
    November 6, 2007

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    Great

    12? Wow, first a 13 year old comes in and blows my mind, then someone even younger does it again. This is great, and it just goes to show how much talent is out there. I can see what you mean with what you have written here and love the line "When everything meant something
    And nothing was just a little piece of everything" that's so true! It kind of reminds me of something I once said too, back in the days of caring..."If we see everything as something, we will never have nothing" Great writing, and good luck in the contest!

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