A relationship of power,
drawn to the mist of time.
Sudden cries of whispered pain,
blood shot eyes with streams of tears.
Corrupt in thinking thoughts,
lost in the tick tock movement.
Wrapped in my own coffin,
whispers of love in the wind.
Uncontrolable power of destruction,
flames of black and red spread.
Dinging bells of loneliness,
a wanting of misery and pain.
Kill the happiness inside of you,
create a blood thirst for nothing.
A sullen and sunken look of day,
power of thunder, wind, and rain rest.
Swift like that dance of the waves,
blinding light not there and missing.
Black flames for an aura,
burning threw the challenges around.
Hurting the kind and helping the strong,
bring down the wrong side with stares.
Till you see an orange jumpsuit covered in red,
a pink dress crying over him and dying away.
A thought of death and hurt,
tears and cries of pain.
Blood on your hands burning into the skin,
a scar of shattered weakness and nothing left to live for.
Author notes
Anime inspired (Naruto mostly...)
A contest entry
- THE BEST YOU CAN DO! please enter... :) by LilMrsAttitude.
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Comments
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Wow! Thank you for entering- this is really awesome!
Vivien
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1st of all, thank you for submitting. 2nd, there are a few... typos?... throughout your write.
1. Corupt----> Corrupt
2. Unconroble----> Uncontrolable
3. balck----> black
4. htere----> there
5. helping that strong----> helping the strong
6. and rain the rest----> and rain, the rest.
Other than the technical, well-written piece. Particularly enjoyed the metaphors. Also, thank you for reading the rules... saw the option on the preview! Although it isn't in the author's notes, I will accept this placement of option choice.
Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
~*DJ*~
P.S. The 1st dark entry forfeited their applause because they haven't corrected since I checked last. Congrats on being the 1st entry in the dark category!
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