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Darkness

Darkness surrounds,
breath sucked away.
Deep pain sears.
Darkness eating me away.
Heart ripped out,
death is near,
One more breath,
Life is gone.

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  • vici377
    November 6, 2007

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    DARK

    extremely DARK and I love it...it's brevity makes it's impact...absolutely love it.. and love the ending..Life is gone...Brilliant..great write sis and good luck in the contest..

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 6, 2007
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    I would say you accomplished dark

    Thanks for entering.