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No Love... Just Ashes

Without embrace,
I enter myself,
burrowing pitches of black

Touching my heart,
grasping palpitations,
pulling ashes from my soul









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Prompt: Picture Inspired

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 6, 2007

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    WOW love the take here... Very profound
    Best of luck to you in the contest

    Delila

  • ashjoe76
    November 6, 2007

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    excellent!

    Deeply moving verse! Only with a perfect control of the craft and form can someone create such a profound effect through words! Congrats dear friend!

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 6, 2007

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    Nice take on the prompt, but you need to be careful with your tenses, you started in past, then went into present, not quite consistent, really not a bad take on the prompt, though.

    thanks for entering