she signs
her name
with disdain;
no longer
love
she whispers
your name
in hope
of a
sign
A contest entry
- no love poetry by Suzanne Dia.
700 points, ended November 10, 2007, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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oh, this is absolutely beautiful... heart wrenching and haunting... intense imagery in the form of emptiness... you seem to have incorporated the picture into the prompt as well... clever and masterfully composed!
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thank you
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Beautiful poetry... nice work. Congrats on the silver.
~Namita
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truely,
'tis a weeping heart poem and makes me sad to read of sorrow entrenched. aye, the distain is there, but 'tis the heavy kind that wraps its self arounf one whom 'as been broken so badly, that suddenly... 'tis what becomes the glue that holds one together. that ye 'ave lost hope in yourself, and instead needs for an outside source to provide it for ye.
'tis no wonder why ye 'ave a silver... as ye weave an encanteing weave.
arden
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The disdain makes it complete. It shows relief and emancipation. No longer the torture of bloody hope. Forceful lines. Great write, congrats.
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very nice work here Elaine
al
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Nice
I like it, ain't got no reason, just do.
Joe
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just big hugs.... and we'll talk soon
yes
gin and talk
talk and gin
gin and gin
then some more talk
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Whew intense pieve you have penned well done and best of luck to you in the contest
delila
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This is a sad but lovely depiction of the duality of feeling when a relationship collapses, the forced 'disdain' concealing the hopes for reconciliation.
Wonderfully and concisely painted, Elaine.
PJ
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thank you for understanding it
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a great take on the prompt - I like how you explore the two meanings of 'sign' in this...excellent emotion from this. Great poem!
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- the signs come when you look for them..
nice. you have refound your voice
m
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thank you mary
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you know
lol
i encourage you clever poets to enter
and then hang myself when it's time to judge
really a cool spin on the image and prompt
i remember signing those papers
bittersweet, and so appropriate
thank you elaine
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