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Miss President

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Miss President

Never forget that November
Election day it was
A day we will all remember
Elected just because
They elected me to take the seat
As president, to meet and greet
They elected me
They elected me
They wanted me because I’m sweet

For just a day I took the job
They asked me for new laws
And they asked me, to stop the mob
So I took it without a pause
They wanted me to stop the crime
They asked me to clean up the grime
They wanted me
They wanted me
This line’s just here to make it rhyme

Now the first law, that I did change
Was legalize the guns
Some people may think, that it’s strange
But they’re the only ones
Give ’em the guns, it’s the new law
The biggest guns they ever saw
Give ’em the guns
Give ’em the guns
But the bullets, we did withdraw

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    November 13, 2008

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    Give them guns, you had me worried I had come across a mountain top Patriot group but you snatched it back to reality with the with holding of bullets. Charlton Heston will be rolling in his grave but it put a smile on my face well done...
    Cyber


  • Swan song gold member
    November 16, 2007

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    You got my vote ! More guns! big guns ! but we need bullets to. This was a cute and funny one Esp since I love things that go boom!


  • Fearylynn
    November 7, 2007

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    The middle stanza made me giggle. Well, the whole thing made me giggle, but only YOU could get away with "this line's just here to make it rhyme."


  • ellipsist
    November 7, 2007

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    cute and clever!

    just like its author!


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    You would make a lovely queen, and I think you will be one darn good leader!!

    Hope you could rule out a day that is Poetry day, so we can all stay home from work and only wright. lol!!

    I love poetry that has some imagination. Kind of free the mind?

    This was a lovely poem and I enjoyed reading it very much!

    All the best in the contest!

    Love
    Becks


  • artis
    November 6, 2007

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    Guns and roses, all in a bullet-tin of peace

    I like that, and you would be fun to watch...as you strolled in to Hail to the queen....not a chief by any standards. Love, Artis


  • Nevel
    November 6, 2007

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    This is a funny and ironic poem.you surprised me with a different poetry-form.I guess in America everybody can be president,so why not a poetress? guns without bullets.. !


  • PerVirtuous
    November 6, 2007

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    Very funny! Fantastic use of irony and humor. Purty gurl shure do writes good! I would vote for you for anything. Dog catcher to president. You da MAN!


  • Desire gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    Oh My!!!

    Holy Moly
    Love this piece and the last line I chuckled hard on

    This is one Beautiful piece which had me giggling

    You are so darn Creative!!
    Ok..Me vote for You

    Thank You for sharing Your Poetic Talent!!

    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet One!
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • StarEyes
    November 6, 2007

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    What a great job, and hey, maybe YOU can straighten up the mess we call The USA today...Hmmmm, I wonder, let's see, where should you start? hmmmm, how about bringing our boys and girls home?

    Oh well I guess we have start somewhere, and well with you in office, we might get somewhere. hehe. Great job!! I'd vote for you...

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 6, 2007
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    You got my vote.

    Love it!
    Joe


  • seamaiden
    November 6, 2007

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    This is very good. I haven't seen this form before and I will have to study it a little more. I thought you were going to be writing about Hilary here and got a nice surprise when you didn't. Best of luck in the contest. It is comical and still gets a point across. I love it. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥


  • grannyeri gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    First time I have heard of this form - you have used it well in this contest. Each of us would do certain things we beleive in if we had the chance to be president. Interesting rhythm, rhyme and flow in these lines.


  • HaleyMary
    November 6, 2007

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    Good write, Sis. I especially liked the ending. Without bullets, there would be no way for people to injure each other even if they had guns. I never thought of it that way before. Very clever. Good luck in the contest.


  • daviscth silver member
    November 6, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this entry into my contest and thanks for explaining the kind of piece it is. It really helped me to read it better. I wish you all the best at judging. Cathy

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