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finger play paints her

 
 

 

 

 
with sign language
for blind people,
hands masturbate
around
a heart-shaped
hollow.  

 

she is free
to finger
ancient history.
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

  

Author notes

And no - this is not about love

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  • TheRamer
    November 8, 2007

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    hmmm... very different... I LOVED the imagery... and again, i hate you because you can paint in image so vibrant with the fewest amount of words... Great write! and i seriously love you name!


  • Namita
    November 8, 2007
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    And this is called brilliance


  • michael thomas gold member
    November 8, 2007
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    ew.....hands off the potatoes, they're hot like tomatoes....


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    November 7, 2007
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    i loved the fuck you to this
    within weird pain
    but that is just where i went lol


  • marc creamore
    November 6, 2007
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    Bloody powerful . . . OH SO BLOODY POWERFUL!!!!!!


  • delightfulmess silver member
    November 6, 2007

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    oh yes this is fantastic. Excellent take on the pic. Best of luck to you in the contest


    Delila


  • misselaineous
    November 6, 2007
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    ouch
    and oooh
    this is good


  • ellipsist
    November 6, 2007

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    lol... doesn't sound to me to be about love wonderful flow and take on the prompt... love the way the ideas are expressed... creative and genuine and wonderful play on words!


  • layla.
    November 6, 2007

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    OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO you queen! I LOVE THIS!!!! what a brilliant ending.

  • Michael P
    November 6, 2007

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    Excellent

    Finger Play Paints Her. A great title and just as well your play on words. I liked the way you at once bind her hands(eyes) and set her free. Well done and good luck in contest.


  • astralshepherd gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    language, when used as skillfully as this, transcends meaning and reaches into realms of unconscious thoughts where dreams and images arise…your poem, I think, does that here – creates a wholly other reflection of life. And while not about love, i find myself completely taken by this poem, I love it.

    blessings and best wishes,
    ~r.


  • Naridill
    November 6, 2007
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    if only words could sing

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 6, 2007

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    Reminds me of something I wrote once about the way the heat of someone's hands could still be felt, days, weeks, and even months after. That WAS a love poem, but now to read it, there is only sadness, the ghost of a memory that doesn't quite exist anymore.

    Love this take on the prompt.

    you


    thank you

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