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How Mournful.





how mournful
knowing I shall leave this world--
a headstone
covered with lichen
and columbine

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Lurie
    July 13

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    Oh no, Your spirit will linger in all of us! You will never really leave!

    The body is merely a shell
    the soul
    is the true heart of who we are
    and the soul never dies ~Lurie


  • donnz
    December 5, 2008

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    I heard that!

    However upon reflection, I have chosen the organ donation and burn the rest...something about contributing at least (1) thing of value.

  • Pari Ali
    March 13, 2008

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    made me think

    it would be sad indeed Andrew if that was all one left behind but i think not for so much we are have done, given or said is etched on so many hearts and minds I think we all leave behind much more than we shall ever know.


  • Emerald13
    January 19, 2008
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    revisiting a few

    just realised ... this was written on my birthday ...


  • kvwriter silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    Nice work, Andrew! And I couldn't agree with your author bio more! I, too, am perusing my poetry and comments and doing some heavy rewriting. Ready to learn more.--It is mournful to think of what we might leave behind; instead of a headstone, I do know we will leave behind love, our love as we head into new Love. The very thought of a headstone makes me sad so you certainly evoked emotion with such brevity too! Good to see you again, Friend! Be blessed!--Kel


  • haikumonk gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    Solid write. Vivid contrasts bring the imagery straight to the reader's consciousness..... heartfelt....... sensitive and very visual.


  • motel silver member
    December 8, 2007
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    even though the poem deals with loss, the beauty in this piece is remarkable...thank you.


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    November 7, 2007
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    Always enjoy your tanka and haiku--another one with outstanding images and feelings!


  • Emerald13
    November 6, 2007

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    so many thoughts trickle through my mind before i can gather what to say ... poetry-wise its lovely .. the clinchers for me are the word columbine (giving such a lovely image of delicate white, pink and blue bonnets) and the pivot ... (it would work very well perhaps? without the punctuation) .. 'i shall leave this world a headstone'.. of course but then it becomes a run on sentence ?

    lovely piece ... i hope you are well ... >>> Gina


  • azure85 gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    Oh, such a good tanka, Andrew. Thoughts we all have at one time or another, and the images of the headstone over time are very good.

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