how mournful
knowing I shall leave this world--
a headstone
covered with lichen
and columbine
Andrew Hide
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I heard that!
However upon reflection, I have chosen the organ donation and burn the rest...something about contributing at least (1) thing of value.
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made me think
it would be sad indeed Andrew if that was all one left behind but i think not for so much we are have done, given or said is etched on so many hearts and minds I think we all leave behind much more than we shall ever know.
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revisiting a few
just realised ... this was written on my birthday ... -
Nice work, Andrew! And I couldn't agree with your author bio more! I, too, am perusing my poetry and comments and doing some heavy rewriting. Ready to learn more.--It is mournful to think of what we might leave behind; instead of a headstone, I do know we will leave behind love, our love as we head into new Love. The very thought of a headstone makes me sad so you certainly evoked emotion with such brevity too! Good to see you again, Friend! Be blessed!--Kel
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Solid write. Vivid contrasts bring the imagery straight to the reader's consciousness..... heartfelt....... sensitive and very visual.
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even though the poem deals with loss, the beauty in this piece is remarkable...thank you.
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Always enjoy your tanka and haiku--another one with outstanding images and feelings!
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so many thoughts trickle through my mind before i can gather what to say ... poetry-wise its lovely .. the clinchers for me are the word columbine (giving such a lovely image of delicate white, pink and blue bonnets) and the pivot ... (it would work very well perhaps? without the punctuation) .. 'i shall leave this world a headstone'.. of course but then it becomes a run on sentence ?
lovely piece ... i hope you are well ... >>> Gina -
Oh, such a good tanka, Andrew. Thoughts we all have at one time or another, and the images of the headstone over time are very good.
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