The pain in my heart that no one can understand,
Only me as it keeper.
No one can save me no, not you or I.
No one can think of what pain I possess,
I am all alone in the world,
The suffering I must indoor.
No one hears they cry of the pour,
No one understands.
Can’t you hear my screaming?
Can’t you feel my pain?
Impossible to heal.
The people that are like me.
They might understand,
They might heal my wounds from hell,
And save me from myself.
And then he came alone,
To save me.
Though he is week,
He still can heal.
I never thought that,
He could make me,
Happy again,
But still he heals,
But still heals me.
The pain that I might never forget about,
But still he came and healed my pain,
And now I stand tall for something’s,
Some memories are gone,
Some memories, that are sad, have gone away.
He came and healed my pain.
And even thought most pain is still inside of my heart,
Even though he still won’t heal me all,
He is my prayer,
He is my savor,
Because if he could heal at least some…
Well that make me all the better.
Thank you, for he is god.
And he is my prayer for me,
My lightened angel,
My soulful light.
My heart’s warmth,
Thought the winter night.
He keeps me close,
And he helps me though.
All the pain.
For all that’s living,
And all that’s their,
I have my man.
He will take my small pain away.
Even if it’s just some.
Years have past, and pain still is hear,
The heart is ice, still.
Thought he melts some pain away from my heart,
It’s their,
Yes, it is their.
My pain will never end.
Even if he comes again.
Even if my light, oh, my shining light.
My angel,
My god.
Oh, I pray he comes again.
Because I know
He will melt my pain.
A contest entry
- Open Wounds by Eugene Cash Hensley.
700 points, ended November 26, 2007, 19 entries
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Comments
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This is a beautiful piece that is superbly raw with feeling. I could really relate to it. It should be a winner with a little polishing in the grammar and spelling. For example; "Thought"- I think that you meant "Though". My advice also, is to do a spellcheck and to try reading your piece outloud to yourself, as though you are reading it to someone besides yourself.
Good luck in the contest!
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There are several grammatical errors and spelling errors that could keep this from making it into the preliminary finalists... i would like to see you get this proofread and then make the corrections... i love the emotions...


