Wake up,
Running late,
It's raining again.
In work,
Boss shouts,
Headache again.
Bus home,
Schoolkids,
Shout abuse again.
Get home,
Cook food,
Burn it again.
Work sucks, but the wife won't,
Day ends, but my life won't.
A contest entry
- A Day In The Life by WillAlwaysLove.
1200 points, ended November 6, 2007, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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very good
well your wife might not suck but im sure others would
love Xx RachaeL xX
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Nice ending. It is sad but that is what I wanted. Your day sounds shitty! I hope it will change one day for the better. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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welcome back stranger, never thought id see you on here again, many thanks for my comment.
now.... erm, im not sure on the contest rules and what they are asking, but anyway... this seemed all so boring and routine, perhaps that what you intended, not sure.
maybe it would of worked better without the wife won't part... that bit didnt really fit.
but all the same, best of luck in the contest.
speak to you soon
sky a.k.a kaz xxxxxxxx
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