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the dreamer

I can rhyme some word and write pretty verse
I can make you cry with just one word,
but I am not a poet
I can tell of nightmares no-one has
I can captivate you and leave you sad,
but I am not a poet
I can romance your senses with tales of love
I can sing you songs from the gods above,
but I am not a poet
I am a man of questions and deluded beliefs
I am a man all ways happy never knowing grief,
I am a dreamer

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  • Pretty.Rave.Boy
    September 17

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    "I am a man all ways happy"
    It should be 'always' not 'all ways'.
    Unless, of course, you mean you're happy in all ways. If that makes sense...
    Anyway! Nice poem. Really. It's unique, and interesting.


  • MelodiousDreaming
    September 8
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    Wonderful ^_^ you have a way with words

  • remonray
    September 2

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    nice

    I like the way it emphasizes that you don't consider yourself a poet yet you have the ability to make someone feel so many different things

  • satan-
    July 12

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    Very nicely done. Beautiful parallelism with the poet and dreamer lines, and the fluidity is very smooth. I like the almost airy feel of the poem, but yet there's so many emotions attached... You have a lovely way with words. Thanks for entering!

  • Burnifer
    July 9
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    Wow I really felt this. Good write!


  • Nephlim
    July 8
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    Love it. Simple as that . The rhyming was very steady and fluid, and the lines were memorable. I loved how you repeated the "I am not a poet" line, and ended it with "I am a dreamer." There's a difference, I guess. But you're poem so lies, you're a poet if ever I've read one .
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • daviscth silver member
    July 5

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    I really like the imagery in this piece. You've done a wonderful job with it.
    Good luck to you in the contest.


  • you promoted!!!
    so i came!


    there's a kind of balance to this.. like your words swing back and forth, slightly playfully but making your point.
    yeah, i like this. you've painted a dreamer nicely. it makes you wonder what adventures you can take people to.

    though i must say.. this bit "I can captivate you and leave you sad," it really reminded me of my recent self... though it was never the intention.. bah!

  • coooooool as eva
  • i love it!
    much clown love
    Pixie

  • This is really good. It kinda makes you go "?!" at first, but in the end, you realize"that is sooo true" Great write!!


  • uglyfetus
    April 14

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    I like this poem alot to. All your writings are great. Im pretty new to this site and writing poetry but i think i have defenently found some really good poetry i like. Keep it up.


    • Fulabeans
      April 14
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      thank you for your kind wordS about my poetry. So you are new to the site and poerty? I hope you enjoy it here there are alot of good poets and it is a good place to improve your skills. I hope you find your place here and I will most certinly read some of your poetry

  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 14

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    Interesting form theme and idea. Basically well carried through, you show promise my friend

  • Wonderful

    Ilove this this has so much passion. Exelent you should add this to a contest!

  • Nangaleema
    March 9

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    So refreshing to encounter modesty! I think the words "poet" and "poetry" are often used a bit loosely. It is inspiring that you have put thought into what it means to be a "poet". After reading this, I wondered if the final line was an affirmation of happiness and satisfaction or an implication of a desire or a "dream" to be more? - either way this piece is a nice read. - NANGALEEMA

  • so..i'm gonna smack you if you ever say your poety sucks again, cause dear...this was amazing.

    its so short and simple
    and is so true

    the ending was my favorite part

    wonderful Job Dustin!

    -♥-
    Kels

  • Servul
    February 20

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    Love the poem, love the name, not too sure why i really like it, it jsut really gets to me and makes me feel good, Great Job (:

  • Alyx Cosnahan
    February 5

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    w0t I loved it. The ending is perfect. *I am a dreamer*

    Your poems DO NOT suck so dont ever say that again



    But yea. And since you apparently arent a poet, you are very good at writing poems! Keep writing...foreva


  • Violent Glass
    January 22
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    wow
    this is... incredible


  • Ambarrr
    January 8

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    OOooOO
    I liked it alot.
    Very true.
    Loved the repetition =)
    "I can romance your senses with tales of love
    I can sing you songs from the gods above."

    Simply amazing.


  • Autumnpoet
    December 9, 2007
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    Hey so what was this ..A poem.
    Nice way of expressing


  • Mysti1ThroughWitHim
    November 13, 2007

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    Holy Sheep!!

    I love this one...and it is soo true of all of us....I love the repition....I'd give it twenty applauses if i could


  • CandiedRose
    November 12, 2007
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    i really like this

    im not sure why
    buts its capturing.


  • Zahir
    November 11, 2007
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    "I am a man all ways happy never knowing grief,
    I am a dreamer" Are you referring to the saying "Ignorance is bliss"? I guess not, it just made me think of that I wonder what your definition of a poet is, if it's not a man/woman questioning life?
    Anyway, interesting.


  • Blushing Lily
    November 9, 2007
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    very thought provoking... somewhat bittersweet. I like this.


  • Stardust-luvr
    November 7, 2007

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    ny dear friend often we poets bring forth our words from imagination and dreams so yes your are firsthand a dreamer secondly a poet well done and many blessings always xx


  • SilverMoonFeathers
    November 7, 2007
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    This is very good uplifting spirits in a way im not sure of and can't surly say

  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    interesting poem...

    but I say you are a poet!
    I like your running tally of things you can do, and I really love the concluding lines.
    Wonderful poem!

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