Let your hands lie within my mind
You're my pen and I'm the writer
You ask me coins,
I shall give you rice seeds.
For you to reap.
Understand...?
It's hard, I know.
But by the time
fields turn gold
you shall understand.
A contest entry
- Quickie Contest, 50 words or less, 10 entries, 30 minutes, free Verse Only, Beat The Cloak :) by Cupcrazy.
550 points, ended November 6, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critics and critiques are welcome :)
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smile na lang ako
pero atleast nakuha ko
lalo na ngayon ginto na ang presyo ng bigas
hehe
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Wonderful...But mothers do understand much more than their children think...Understand? You will when the field gets golden.
Keep up your writing!
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ahh yes, I like this even more. Ties together better. Cool.
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Really interesting unique write, really liked it. I'm not sure about all the repetitions of understand...I'd change the last one. Just to: But in the end
You will. Or something else. But that's just me I loved this write still, very cool. -
Very unique take on the prompt. Thanks for the fine entry. Hugs, Bunny
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