He combed tongue
from mouth
with lies, old as sun.
She was chipped porcelain.
In a list
A contest entry
- the life and impending death of a glass figurine by Cat.
800 points, ended November 10, 2007, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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simply and powerfully stated...
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lier reduced to extreme brevity. i like it..
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Thank you, and you're welcome.
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yeah, i like this a lot too...
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Thanks Al.
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Thanks Yvette.
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this one uses so much less verbage than the last.. but seems to fill in the blanks. - this is excellent- love this series- this study of two folks-
excellent take on the contest theme
very nice
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Thanks M. I love this series too, from the 'writing about it 4 years later' perspective though. lol
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Stacy, it has been way too long that I have jumped the fence to your writings , but I must say that I am not disappointed. These few words open a world of visuals and imaginations that I can only make assumptions about and never know the concrete verite that you wrote it from [but at times I do like that] I can travel anywhere I wish to.......you did show instead of tell-the true gift of talent
much love
xoxoxoxoxoxo
reenie
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Thanks so much for the kind words Reenie.
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I so love this series of yours - definately an example of succinct writing, Stacy!! Great work here - lol, we all know the ones you wrote about here!
~ Nicolette
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Thanks Nic, for all your supportive comments on this series thus far. It's not easy to get these ones out, I guess that validates the need for 3rd person characters.
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