Better to have lost then never have at all
So is that the reason I still cry when you call
Good things happen to those who wait
Whoever said that, I don't have much faith
Life has its 'ifs and thens'
It has its questions of 'now or when?'
The worst to me are 'what if' and 'I wish'
The words that no one would miss
You're my everlasting fear
But for some reason I want you here
What if I can't find my light
Will you be my shining knight?
You're my everlasting fear
My always falling tear
The smile upon my face
The memory I'd erase
If I need someone to care
Will you be the one there
Cause you're my everlasting fear
and all I hold dear...
Author notes
I hate that boy...
I love that boy...
UGH.
Written 10/16/2007
In a list
A contest entry
- From Trash to Treasure by star wars fanatic.
1500 points, ended February 22, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything and everything! by My Selfish Romance.
300 points, ended January 26, 2008, 97 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Input always loved...thanks.
Comments
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I don't like the first stanza where it is. The word choice itself is fine, but I feel like that stanza should be the second to last maybe. Also I didn't feel very moved when I was done reading. If you could add one more stanza that really brought it home... Do you know what I mean? Something different from the rest of the piece that still flows and really plls the reader in to how you are feeling. I do, however, like what you have here. No grammatical errors, and your syllable count is nice. I always like to see that in a piece. Let me know what you think about these comments nd thx for entering.
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god why do you even like him! that's it! i'm goingto find you a nice little 6ft black boy to take care of you and make you feel special and love for ever and ever and ever! you deserve that much! not this loser who doesn't know that you're the best thing that ever happened to his life!
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