I say how I feel and feel how I say,
I tell tales of my victories and of my dismay
so listen to me and I'm sure that you'll find,
I'm a intriguing man who's out of his mind
I tell you the truth for I refuse to lie,
if I jumped out this window I surly can fly
I don't think I'm normal, I'm totally nuts,
stare into my mind before the door shuts
I know not what I am but I know what I'm not,
I would say what that is but I surly cannot
I'm trapped inside a world of harmless delusions,
am I insane, you can draw your own conclusions
A contest entry
- TITLES by fairytalelovestory.
375 points, ended November 7, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter All Your Dark Writes Here (Series - II) by xxRainbowDawnxx.
1500 points, ended March 27, 2008, 95 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Yes my dear you are indeed nuts, but how insane is up to you. At least you have fun with it. And please no jumpping out windows trying to fly unless you have a paracuthe. I kinda like you living and all. It is well written and it ryhmes. I guess the ryhming is a good thing. I like this and thanks for writing this. write more soon!
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This sounds like a rhythm tortis out of alice in wonderland... not that thats a bad thing.
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This
Is awesome! I really really love this poem! Seriously, the rhyming in all of your poetry is flawless. I am quite jealous! This is so cool ^_^. I love it. Keep it up!
Love
Hannah
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i'm really liking this one
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the Guide says the is an art to flying, or rather a knack. The knack lies in beng able to throw yourself at the ground ....and miss.
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ive already commented on this.. but i shall comment again.
a very raw and honest write.
thank you for sharing -
GREAT JOB
Its a great poem and very well expressed. i know not what i am but i know what i am not , i would say what that is but i surly cannot.these lines are great.
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Well the number of comments on this speaks for itself. I have to say the I love this! Hehe I like the 2nd and 4th stanzas. My mind is always shut And yes, you are out of your mind
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I like it!
I love how it flows nicely and how it rhymes! THAT'S SKILL!
(I can't get rhymes to flow to save my life! =p)
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Mpya*
This is sooo amazing !
Omg!!! Im really speechless =|!! Its sooo wonderful !! And please never stop writing poems <3 ! =]
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This poem is pretty cool. I thought it was funny. I wonder how it would turn out if it were longer? The rhyme & flow were great!
~Chelle
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Wow!
I love the parts:
so listen to me and I'm sure that you'll find,
I'm a intriguing man who's out of his mind
and
I'm trapped inside a world of harmless delusions,
am I insane, you can draw your own conclusions
This poem made me smile and thats really hard to make me do so I thank you for sharing this poem!
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Haha, I love the second stanza. And it's true, to boot
. You have a really good way with rhyming words, like the last two in the last two lines 
awesomelyamazingandinsane! Also, the line that was fourth from last, I had to read it over a few times, but I love its meaning =] In life, you may never find out who you are, but you're bound to figure out a dozen different people you're not
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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wow! perfect rhyme... i really enjoyed this piece! the flow was incredible and the rhyme did not seem forced at all! brilliant work! keep writing
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This is awesome Dusty! Great write and keep up the good work! You are special to me and don't you EVER forget that! ttyl bud!
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I love when I can read something and not want to choke the person because their rhyme was forced. Your rhyme flowed so well and the whole write pieced itself together.
Wonderful work
xxxx
hailee -
that was a really good poem
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Very short but nice piece, I like the rhyme and the way you express your deepest emotions so well here. The background is awesome too, don't know if it's yours or not but I like it
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OMG this is awesome. really love it the whole if I jumped out this window I surly can fly is just perfect
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wow, this poem really gave me the creeps. it's a really good write and the words you used flow perfectlty.
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Hmm.. im not sure about this poem,
i mean like it, its great,
im just not sure about it best to me ignore really
But Great Job Anyways (:
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Wow, I don't know what's creepier, your poem (in the best possible way, of course,) or the dude in the background....wonderful flow, very chilling write. I like it.
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OH ohhhhhhhhhhh
I got such a chill up my spine
Haunting but brilliantly formed & written words here.
I am so not finding one of yours I don't like hahahaha...No complaints though, I have been enjoying reading your works a lot
Cindy
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awesome
i like this the background unique
luv amilicious
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Once again, I loved it. Im supposed to be sleeping right now but Im gong to read more of your poems. Because I love them. You are a great poem-writer. Since you arent a poet
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dustin!
WOW!
this was simply amazing.
definately deserved an honourable mention.
one of your very best. well done hun.
♥ Dani
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crazy good
I love it
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Well done.
Delusions rule!! like it, bon chance.
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good
nice work -
well.
I like this poem. it kind of reminds me of the "tell-tale heart." it has some realtions. but that is good i like edgar allan poe's work. so good job. I like it.
~creaticity~
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This si very good i love it it reminds me of me
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wow i enjoyed reading your perception of this title. good luck in my contest.
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