I stood impatiently in any line on any day
Wanting to be there but leaving in a hurry
No time for cordial salutations or greetings
But all the time for interaction
Watching bodies blur by as they scurry
To stand still and wait
Waiting for my number they didn't call
Wondering what the number is I didn't get
While standing behind a line I stood in front of
To be lectured on delinquencies of advance payments
Of current charges last spring due this fall
Why do I debate these issues I agree with?
What reason is there to be here when I just left yesterday?
Knowing life is given outside of oneself
Even though my aborted soul was left within my mothers’ conscience
I lived within a dead carcass
Yet died within a living soul
Twisted to conform into a straight entity
Promising truth that remained a constant lie
As I agreed to disagree
With myself
Of my Contradictory consistencies
In a list
A contest entry
- Contradictory by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended November 13, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This is new to me but I thought it was a challange
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Wow. This verse has such a somber feel to it. I felt like I was on my last job interview, or in the line at the bank or at the grocery store - waiting to pay from the hurry up and shop that I just did, hoping my debit card would clear...
Such realities. - I am not alone.
Well done my poetic friend. I liked this very much. ~Pamela 
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thanks again
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Lots of contradiction here. Thanks for entering.
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thanks - just some weird thoughts
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i am so drawn to you by reading this piece it makes me itch to read more of you good lucky charms in your contest
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LOL!! Thank U. Lucky Charms huh?? Thats cool. I appreciate the kind words. I will return the favor as well. ~ Mykeee
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I love your ODD thoughts
that is what makes you who you are
Keep writing and I will be here to read.
Thanks for always being an inspriation to me and others
ephiphany
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Thank U - Yup as ODD as Odd can be
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Deep
This poem is very deep, your poem is gold in my book you have the contest down, conflicting emotions running through your mind, you know what you want but are not stepping forth to take it. Making promises to yourself over and over that you will go the next step but then backing put when that time comes, but still you long for something or someone. This is the menaing I get from your words but I could be wrong, just let me know if I am wrong. If I have read it wrong please tell me the meaning. Thank you for sharing, good luck and keep this wonderful poetry coming.
raingoddess
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On point my Goddess - I wanted to show How we stop and go. Move ahead by steping back but always wondering if this is what I want, why am i not wanting to go for it. we already know things are different but are they different for everyone or just those that choose to see it as different.
oops i'm yammering ~ Thanks sweetie
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Contradiction to a T
Good Luck M
Love ~sugar~
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Thank ya Sweet Sugar
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Odd thoughts? maybe, but bangin!...This is one not to be cut. You have voiced contradiction perfectly and in such a way we all see ourselves there to some degree, for we are all multifaceted persons. Crisp write. Good luck in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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Hey there Rhonda - yes our lives are always contridictory to someone elses. No one person is the same as another even if they share common likes. So I made it almost ridiculous ~ thanks for the great comments ~ Michael
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Masterful Write
All I can say is you just nailed contradiction to the wall. This shows truly that life itself based on mans glorified rules; is a bitch! at times.......excellent write my Son....Mom
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Thanks mom, right as usual, Lifes a bitch to conform to. So just BE!!! That's my motto. But don't hurt no body Thanks mom!!
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