individualism is dead and nobody mourns in its destruction,
we've all melded and fell prey to conformity's seduction
but I refuse to obey and fall into line,
my life is my own and the decision is mine
we can not be herded as though we are sheep,
we have our own thoughts some shallow some deep
so remove your masks of constant conformity,
and enjoy diversity in all its enormity
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A contest entry
- Prewrite-palooza by swim.x.
1650 points, ended October 6, 2008, 100 entries
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600 points, ended March 3, 16 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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This rolls off of the tongue so easily. It's perfect. Raw emotion. I love it. I think this is one of my favourite it's such a good read! Great work honey.
Love
Hannah
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wow
i thought that was BRILLIANT! the thing is with my poems,i would like them to be deep and thoughtfull poems but i can never think out the write words where as yours are excelent and have used all the write words to express yourself! i guess ill improve over time!
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disregard the last the last line threw me i like it til then but remember its what YOU think that truly matters
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nice rhyme i like the patterns i see here. the statement is clear but wheres the emotion? i would have endevoured to show rage at being forced in to a mold i do not fit or grief at the loss of my own self...meh maybe i put to much into mine
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phew.
i thought i was the only one who felt this way
very raw, honest and deep.
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Nice to meet you earlier on! I rather feel that we got off to a bad start but I've enjoyed reading your work.
This poem is cleverly written and executed in a calm, sensible manner. It is rather reductive but I suppose this speaks for the dissolution of emotional ownership in the modern day.
The juxtaposition between cold isolation and warm communion puts in mind earlier work by John Keats, though perhaps carried off with a little less subtlety in this case.
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lolz this is great
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very nice
I love it , its great.
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this is Genius!!!
i like this one to
big bro!
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I like I like!!!!!! Genius...why didn't I think of this
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very nice
and also very true
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This is an amazing write. I love love loved it. Such a strong statement and oh so true. The rhyme was great and it just flows of the tongue like, just wow. Good for you for being yourself. More people should take advice from you. Great write and thank you for entering.
Josh
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I recently read a book that portrayed the things you did in this poem in a similar way. You might be interested, it's called 'The Wave' by Morton Rhue. I found it interesting and intriguing (your poem, that is) because I can relate to every feeling you penned here. It seems we have the same outlook. So some people might call me / my fashion sense / my personality strange, but what do they know?
Congratulations and good luck in the contest.
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I really liked this! I am a christian but i am not a traditionalist!
I am spiritual but i dont go to church everytime the doors are open.
I loved this because i seen spirtual in it...and yes we all are different i think the world should look at the heart of a person.
Great verse that could mean many things!
~Lisa~
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Your favoritest poem by yourself!
. Even though I still like the new one better... I can't say that I don't like this. It raises a very good point about society and the people that have created [or destroyed it]. Conformity, bla. Like the uniforms we have to wear next year 
. Think I can go to school all nude to protest? 
Once again, the rhyming! The only one I'm not crazy about is the second to last stanza, but it's not horrible at all!
GREAT job
diggin it majorly
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This is really good! It shows how I feel from time to time! Great job and keep it up!
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that's an awesome fuckin rhyme!!!!I love the way you put it and the way it all flowed together was like it rolled off my tongue!!! Very well done! Bookmark!
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wow what a statement this poem makes, good job, its really well written and a powerful idea is what i like about it. When i lived in a small town, i thought that way all the time. Its the type of town where popularity is a contest and everybodies the same, even the people who dont think they are the same (are the same) if you know what i mean. Great work keep it up.
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OMFG !!
another brilliant write with a powerful statement,
you have such a way with words , its truly astonishing how you can be so staunch and peacful at the same time
great write Dustin
i capped your name, you must be special
(pssst fix the comma)
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What a statement, I loved it , this is bloody brilliance sharing such a message..
WAKE UP PEOPLE AND STOP FOLLOWING THE CROWDS!!!!!
You know how to say it my friend
Cindy
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Yes. Talk about freedom! people tryin to tell us what to do screw them three times over with a cherry on top. Loved it
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I love it
This is soo me....I'm a nonconformist because i am nothing but me...i love it
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This si very good hope everyone read this poem it likes smacking some sense into someones block headed ness
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Testify.
We can not be herded, as though we are sheep,
we have our thoughts, some shallow, some deep.
Like the point, like the stand.
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thank you so much! From you this means alot. You don't know me but I really admire your work
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i love it
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