Touch the hand of your love, as you look deep into each others eyes. *
Touch the prickly rose, you picked from a bush - that is dripping with tiny droplets.**
Touch the remains of all the memories of past times you just wanted to forget.***
Taste your salty lips, after they have gently been kissed.*
Taste the raindrops that had fallen from the skies above.**
Taste the tears that line your lips after a silent cry.***
See the person you care for most, standing in front of you - after a kiss that was for sure worthwhile.*
See the rays of the beautiful rainbow, as the storm slowly resides.**
See where the tears have gotten you, after you slowly wipe them away. ***
Author notes
Reading this poem normally - is the way it was written, but at the same time I put asterisks following each line to show how you can connect the story lines together.
Hope is was a pleasant read!
When you asked us to think of serenity - it made me think to think poem I recently wrote - I hope you enjoy it!
A contest entry
- Whatever You Want It To Be by Cursed4Eternity.
600 points, ended November 6, 2007, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Thirty Days Of Serenity by Nostalgia.
495 points, ended November 9, 2007, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Best...Quickie :) by Heavenly Angel.
475 points, ended November 12, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - round one; your best prewrite. by August Starlight.
765 points, ended March 21, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Congrats on your trophies.
This was a pleasant, serene-sounding read. I did pick up on the asterisks and I like how you connected them together. Thanks for entering and good luck. -
it's very pleasent to read, thx. it 's very nice.
(in the contest is written, poem that have won in another contest will be deleted. otherwise you would be in the finalists!) -
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I am pleased that you enjoyed reading this, I guess I missed that while entering the contest. I didn't win gold though! lol.
Thank you.
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This is really nice good luck in the contest Dear and Congrats on the trophies
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Wonderfully done!
You touched upon the senses in quite beautiful ways!
Thank you so much for sharing and for being a part of the contest! -
Wow...That was an surprising first entry....I didn't expect this to be that good, I was wrong. I actually really liked your style...Wow...Well writ. Thanks.
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wow
well said
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Thank you very much for entering my contest! I did enjoy reading this very much. I love the style, never seen before and after reading your author notes, I went back and read it again. Works both ways! Well thank you once again.
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I am so glad! This is such an inspirational poem for me, when I read it - it makes me smile, I hope it did the same for you! I was hoping I wouldn't confuse anyone with the authors notes, I am so glad that you understood. There are silly things like how we touch, taste and see and don't savior those moments and therefore take them for granted.
Again - it makes me very glad just knowing you enjoyed reading it! Thank you so much!
XOXO
Sabrina
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