Meandering down a fallen, beaten path, cracked crumbling
Tracks lead me down a bleeding lonely trail
Jumbled thoughts drift in and out of my fragile
Bruised mind emotions passing across my face
None able to find a home as confusion takes over
Leaving disarray in its wake, as I wonder aimlessly
The pain of desertion, crushing me...my heart stops.
A contest entry
- - One Track Mind - by Desire.
525 points, ended November 7, 2007, 6 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - - Silver...Go For the Gold - by Desire.
400 points, ended May 17, 2008, 3 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Welcome Back!!
Beautiful
Your piece qualifies and elated to see You back
Best wishes in my contest Sweet Soul!!
and much love~ Desire~*~
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brutal and beautiful...great job!
YOu wrote this so very well and inspiring for all of to
choose those words smartly and make them work for us too!
Good job dear poet, good job!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen congrats on the SILVER!!
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This is a great poem. So much imagery is contained in few words, thank you for sharing this. Congratulations on the silver, well deserved.
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I love this poem. Very good imagery.
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Wow! This poem is absolutely amazing. The imagery in this is very vivid and I love it. Congratulations for winning silver. Keep up the excellent work.
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wow... im speechless its really good. keep it up
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Thank You!
Thank You for Your entry: The Trail
Powerful verse that made my jaw drop at the last line
The images jolt the Mind
Emotions tug at the heartstrings:
Bruised mind...
Magnificent!
Just the thoughts alone ...
gets the reader to gasp
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Judging will be done shortly
Best wishes to You in the contest!!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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