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Forks In The Road

The piercing moon
    shimmered and glowed
    casting its glare
    on forks in the road

Tumultuous forces
    include deeds done
    water under bridges
    and words that spun

Like an autumn leaf
    spiraling down
    crunching under feet
    lying on the ground

Crossroads that swell
    from the ocean within
    leave me so full
    with decisions that spin

Around in my head
    pathetic and empty
    wondering with dread
    what happened to twenty

How'd I get so old
    with insides still burning
    up late at night
    still tossing and turning

So I hobble along
    choosing a path
    hoping you find me
    amidst all this wrath

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    December 4, 2007

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    Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering

    Great flow, it rolls off the tongue. The structure is well placed, I liked the way that it looked, it helps to read. Rhyme is good, I don't usually like rhyme.

    Thank you for entering and good luck

    Faerie
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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    December 3, 2007

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    Thanks for entering and welcome to allpoetry

    Well this is the most poetic of all the entries I have read so far in this contest. Nice flow and structure. I really like the hanging indent.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God Bless
    Tammy
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  • Whoochi gold member
    November 22, 2007
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    Excellent rhyme and flows well...Welcome to AP, jump in the waters fine!


  • Rosemary Stroebel silver member
    November 15, 2007

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    Thanks for entering

    A very nice take on the topic of choice. We get to a point in our lives that we will look back and wonder how we got here. That point that you may or may not want to be at.

    Very though provoking with a good rhyme scheme and fluid flow.

    Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance

    Rosemary


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 14, 2007

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    Welcome to All Poetry

    Wow I really loved this! The flow, rhyme and rhythm were very good and I really enjoyed your take on this contest.
    Thanks so much for entering
    Gaylene


  • raggyann
    November 6, 2007
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    great luck on your entry
    this was a true to life poem


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 6, 2007

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    Thanks for your entry :]

    G'day ravensgift ♥

    I found this a very interesting and great write; the choices we make now affect us for years to come and sometimes we make the right ones and not.

    This is beautifully penned.

    Best of luck to you in the contest
    Welcome to AllPoetry
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda

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