Memories of the past
are now nothing more
than faint visions
that voluntarily
re-enter my mind
introducing new emotions
leaving behind the old
which make me weep to realize
that the memories are all I have
and nothing more.
Author notes
Hmmm.....probably not what you were expecting - but I just kinda went with it!
A contest entry
- Quickie: Freeverse & Whatever by Ryno.
300 points, ended November 8, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Very Nice
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I like this... there is a very raw, quite hardly undescripable emotion in this piece, it is one we have all felt from time to time, without exactly knowing what it is... I sense some regret in here.
My suggestions might be to try adding some imagery, I think that could make the poem more strong, I think thats what your missing out on. Also, maybe hard-hitting ending. But I know short poems can sometimes be difficult; but a good short poem is always powerful.
Thank-you for your entry and this piece, very much
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I am sure many can relate to this. Another great write by you and I think you did a terrific job
best of luck to you hun. This deserves GOLD!
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Perfect!
This just about sums up every thing that happens to us (on this EARTH) in a nut shell!
"BOO"
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Hey thanks! I appreciate the feedback - very much so! I was hoping it was a poem that everyone could relate to. Very true to my heart! Thank you for your comment!
Sabrina
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