I keep telling myself I will do better,
Be better.
But then I go and make the same mistakes once again.
And now I'm just trying to breathe.
I know I should keep trying,
But I'm sinking, and I'm too tired to keep going.
You say that you look up to me...
That you are just trying to be like me,
Why do you want to be like a failure?
I hate to be so harsh,
But the truth just came crashing in on me,
I realize that I was wrong,
And I'm beginning to stop caring.
Dear, if I am what you are trying to be like,
Then I should disillusion you quickly,
Because what I am is nothing to envy.
And what I am becoming is even worse.
So just run away while you can,
Because I'm already mostly gone,
And if you stay any longer,
You might just fall along with me.
You don't want that.
So run.
A contest entry
- Quickie: Freeverse & Whatever by Ryno.
300 points, ended November 8, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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You have penned a very nice message here, I really enjoyed this piece because of its blunt honesty... I thank-you for stepping into the shoes of these people who are influential in the badest of ways... for personifying peer pressure. Thank-you, very nice idea for a write... very well enjoyed.
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so powerful
"Why do you want to be like a failure?" This is so very sad. But it's a very honest piece and you are certainly not trying to cover things up. It just makes me feel very sad.
Hope your admiring friend DOES stick by you.
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very well written. Flowing right out onto the paper. I enjoyed!!
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