All you see
When you look at me
Is my brown eyes, red hair;
Just my physicality.
But upon further inspection,
There's more than meets the eye.
Let me describe me,
For no one knows better than I.
I can be the average teenager,
Obsessed with music and boys.
Then I can be the poet,
Armed with words and poise.
On the outside
I'm overjoyed
With all of life's little things,
yet easily annoyed.
Delve a little deeper,
in our guided tour of me.
On our left,
There's something you normally don't see.
It's my deep, dark secrets.
Where I get my inspiration.
My evil twin inside of me,
who gives me my artistic creations.
The side of me that seems a bit morbid.
The one you should avoid.
The one sucking me into the deep abyss
My black hole or my void.
It's a part of me a yearn to hate.
But can't manage to do.
If I destroy her,
I'd destroy me too.
But don't fret,
On our right, is a little peice of hope.
The little peice of innocence
That helps everyone cope.
To cope with all the darkness,
The shallowness, and lies
The side that makes the rain clouds part
and give way to clear skies.
Right now there is a magnificent battle
between the dark and light.
The problem is who to stand behind.
Can you imagine my plight?
At the moment it's a stalemate.
But still the Titans clash
My heart is the battleground
and my soul is where they smash.
I doubt that when you look at me
You see two opponents with swords unsheathed.
But I guess all you have to do
Is look at what is underneath
Author notes
ahh ijust want to say it wasn't resubmitted or anything (i wrote it for this contest) but for some reason its there twice and i cant delete either because ones entered and one has comments.
A contest entry
- Show me inside your head by icyrose.
900 points, ended November 8, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is amazing, i kinda have a theory everyone has 2 personalities in a sense, just one is more dominant then the other, i know (i have 3 0.o) how you described yourself was just....well...pretty friggin shweet lol, this is just a great right all around great job!
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I loved how you took me into the depths of your mind like it was a tour, that made it very original. I like this very much because it describes the two sides of every human being, but with almost an ironic tone, as if it is a slow journey in which one must never take everything too seriously. The flow was absolutely excellent, all the words simply rolled off my tongue.
I smiled as I read this, I have rarely seen something so cleverly constructed and full of originality.
Outstanding job with this!
Good Luck!
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very verryyy nice. i think it's one of your best poems yet!!
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I understand what you mean completely- having so many parts of a person- i feel the same- i can relate to "It's a part of me a yearn to hate.
But can't manage to do.
If I destroy her,
I'd destroy me too. "
thats worded perfectly.
this line's another fav: "My heart is the battleground
and my soul is where they smash."
I like the way you word things.
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