Comparing situations
This one better than before
I'm with someone who loves me
Instead of with you
You abusing whore
The horizon is so bright
And the dark well behind me
And I left you far behind
Oh how you wish you could be me
Though you hurt me and it burned
I was used, and my love spurned
I keep integrity inside me
It's all you wish for
Wish you could be
Pray to god
For all it will do
Anyone can
But for you no good
I seek someone wholesome
And someone who's pure
I found that someone
A love that will endure
But within you is lies
False justification and hate
And you realize what you lost
And just like the others
Too late!
A contest entry
- Quickie: Freeverse & Whatever by Ryno.
300 points, ended November 8, 2007, 13 entries
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Comments
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Hmm.. I am not completely sure about some of these rhymes and images, they can be worked on I think for a better flowing poem... some nice raw emotion is here though, so that makes a good building ground. Just work at what you got. Thanks for your entry
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