Drawn down this urban stretch
bordering on a glide,
she is dispensing with nothing
and she pretends to gauge it all,
she is delivering messages
as steady she goes, straight as a line
all for me, all for me.
I drink the jaunt, and
abandon my control of the fury
to strafe the night, and
just to relinquish my own resolve
I bide her time and set free
the devil in red, who does it
all for me, all for me.
She yields to no one, and
stops at nothing,
if I keep her steel heart full
and vow to give her each beat of mine
then she will lay waste to those
foolish enough to cross our path
all for me, all for me.
Author notes
“Let me tell you a little something about love, Dennis. It has a voracious appetite. It eats everything. Friendship. Family. It kills me how much it eats. But I'll tell you something else. You feed it right, and it can be a beautiful thing, and that's what we have.” -Arnie
A contest entry
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1000 points, ended November 17, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Creative piece here.
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Amazing
This is the best piece I've read in a while...
I loved the lines
"I bide her time and set free
the devil in red, who does it"
and the repetition really helps the flow
...Well done. I loved it.
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Bravo! Standing in applause!
Ryan! An amazing piece. "as steady as she goes, straight as a line"
This is truly unwavering. Your descriptive words like "I drink the jaunt" and "Drawn down this urban stretch" set images so precisely for this hard hitter.
Oh I did enjoy this very much. Well done poet! ~Pamela
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I agree in every way with achilleslove, this is a fabulous poem! It's flow is magnificent and it's meaning is clear. You realy wrote a great poem here.
Kaitlyn
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Oh, I have MISSED reading your work!!! This is fabulous, Ryan, in every way, shape and form. I can't put my finger on exactly why I love this, but I really do adore every line because each is more perfect than the one before. I love the repetition of "all for me, all for me." I would take this over a Stephen King novel any day! It's brilliant and flows so seamlessly from the first line to the last. This is a true masterpiece and I'm glad you're back!
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Thank you, Linzy. To be honest, the entire poem started from those three words. So you're not left in the dark, this is based on "Christine" but like I said, more on the movie than the book. Anyone who read the book hated the movie, so I guess I'm in that very small minority that thought the movie was better. Thanks for the kind words.
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You are more than welcome. I have never heard of Christine, so that still doesn't mean a whole lot, but I really liked this. Usually the book is almost always better than the movie, so if there is any book I've read that I've liked, I don't watch the movie! Then it just spoils it and that's no fun.
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Here's the basic plot, taken from IMDb: "Arnie Cunningham is a typical high school nerd who is picked on, overruled by his parents, and has very few friends. Until he meets Christine, a run-down bright red 1958 Plymouth Fury and buys her. Arnie learns that Christine has a thing for him and devotes his time to restoring her to Mint Condition. But over time, Arnie begins to change and becomes disconnected with reality and his friends. Arnie's girlfriend Leigh and best friend Dennis find out that Christine's previous owner cared about nothing else when he bought her and find out that Arnie is becoming just like him. The only way they can bring Arnie back to reality is to destroy Christine, but Arnie and Christine are ready to destroy them first and anyone else who gets in their way."
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That helps.
Thanks!
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