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Burns Me

Guide me onward into the night,
The sun burns me where I stand.  

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This is reletivly old.
And Short.

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  • Dancing the Rumba
    November 5, 2007

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    Good start
    Think about these questions if you want to continue the poem:
    Who is guiding you?
    Why does the sun burn you?

    That's all for now,
    Vivien


    • water-spirit-ryuu
      January 8, 2008
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      Those... are REALLY good questions... I'll have to think about it. ^_^

      Would the meaning get clearer, or more murky though, if I continued the poem?