My mind is always racing,
never slowing down.
It's constantly in motion,
I feel like I may drown.
My brain is on such overload,
thoughts running at full speed.
To even slow them down a bit,
would be a blessing, yes indeed.
I've tried soothing meditations,
but none of them do work.
I feel as though I'm crazy,
about to go berzerk.
Anorexia leaves me tired,
OCD makes thoughts run high
I ask to be more sane,
but my prayers are left to die.
The road to my recovery,
is just so very long.
I cannot seem to end this pain,
for I am not that strong.
A contest entry
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great flow in this piece sounded like it came from the heart, thanks for entering ind best of luck
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the road to my recovery is just so very long i cannot seem to end this pain for I an not that strong.. wonderful pen and powerful writing.. I can feel and understand this pice very much.. tanks for the entry.
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great write! The simplicity followed by the complexity of its meaning. It was a very wellwritten poem, and i loved it. Thanks for entering this into my contest,
and good luck. Best of wishes,
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This is a very vivid description of a very
personal pain. The earnestness in which you
explain is very touching and moving. a very
good poem.
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It's not easy to deal with so many problems all at once... it's quite frightening, actually. I have ocd myself, so I know that is... to be generally miserable too, I do feel for you. If you ever need to talk I am here for you.
Thanks for entering, best wishes
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you will be one day. It takes time.
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Not sure of the form but not a bad poem
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I think ...
you will be as strong as you need to be. Just hang in there and things will get better. In the meantime, try flaxseed oil in small amounts on your food, and also raw broccoli, brussels sprouts, and cauliflour. I think it might pick you up.
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stay strong hunny
thanks for your entry, and good luck in the contest -
Happy Hood-Wink!
Hello dear Poet ~ congratulations on being targetted by the Poetic Bandits for a mass visitation!
I truly hope these comments bring a smile to your face and a new confidence to your writing.
I love rhyming poetry ~ it's my favourite kind, especially when good meter and flow are an integral part of it. Here, you have all the essentials for your reader to appreciate, and although the theme of this poem is filled with pain and a sense of defeat, you have written it bravely and with a clever precision in its genre.
Well done, and keep up the great work!
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Hood-Winked!
Life is full of decisions, some easier to make than others, this is a quandry many face, but the only way you would lose, is if you made the wrong choice...
Sometimes I put pen to paper and write down all the things I have to be thankful for, and usually they far outway the painful and negative things in my life...
Strength comes from the heart and spirit, sometimes invisible, but it's whats holding you together right now, and that strength comes from God...
This poem is emotionally engaging, and has a powerful affect, although I feel it could benefit from being put into stanzas, instead of a column, but that is just a thought
You have been ambushed by a Bandit
~Lilac
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Hood-Winked!
Good luck in the contest... I would change the line 'but none of them do work' to something like 'none of them seem to work'... but that is just my opinion... from reading other works from you, I know that you are that strong... I wish you the best... your poetry is beautiful - it is a shame that it has to come from such a painful place.
Keep writing
Polly -
Hoodwinked
Evidently, you are stronger than you think Sweetie Sorry for your pain but I think getting your thoughts out here might also be a big help to you. Your rhythm and rhyme are wonderful here, they flow flawlessly Best of luck in the contest. Be well and be blessed
You've Been Hoodwinked
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Thank you for letting my know about not using caps to start each new line. I will correct that shortly. Thanks for the kind words
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Hoodwinked
You keep saying you aren't thaqt strong but you are stronger than you think. Keep hanging in there. It will turn out okay. -
Hood-Wink!
If you are still breathing, then there is some hope, however far away it may feel. Don't give up! I enjoy reading poetry that has a definite meter to it, as yours does. Your emotions come through strongly, though your future works could be made more poignant by using more imagery, than merely "telling" about the emotions and struggles. Keep writing, though, for it is a wonderful catharsis.
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I thank you all for such inspirational words. Life has been rough for me and i feel at constant battle with myself but i have to keep hanging in there. Thanks again people for being so nice to me.
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HOODWINKED !!!
This is a poem of dispair but it is a 911 poem. You need help and I pray that our God will direct your life to full recovery, that this precious gift of life may be more fully appreciated in the days and years ahead. Your writing touches the heart, please remember, you are not alone. God Loves You!
You have been Hoodwinked by the Poetic Bandits today because WE CARE!
Dennis
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HOOD-WINKED!
Only Jesus can end that pain.
Only Him can give you that peace that you seek.
Keep strong in there because I know that you can make it.
you are very talented.
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HOOD-WINK!!!
Strong poem, strong feelings. Must be very hard to cope with all you have to cope with. I think you're a strong woman and I admire your will to survive.
You've been hoodwinked by a Poetic Bandit.
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Okay... how ironic is it that I click on "Return the favor" and get sent to the poem that you entered! lmao! IRONY! Anyways, you've already gotten the response on this from the contest... which PLEEAAAASSSSEEEEEE correct... last warning... don't mean to be mean, but I can't help it... It's my nature I guess!
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Beautiful
I love it, it gives a faith to humanity that no one is alone. There are more people with these feelings and it is wonderful you can present them. I wouldn't be surprised if you help others with this peice.
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Hey there! Thank you, knickerdew to the response to my poems. I have read some of your work and you do such great writes.
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Actually... I think you penned (typed) an excellent poem.
I understand that you are writing about the way your medication makes you feel, along with the hopelessness that many who are afflicted by the same disease feel.
Very touching write.
Thanks for sharing it with us and keep writing!
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Warning #1:
Thank you for entering my contest. Please re-read the rule below the options... Once you have done so, please correct. Thank you. -
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a note
I'm sorry if i messed up on the rules. I am pretty new to this whole poetry thing. I dont know if you knew, I really wasnt talking about street drugs. You see, I have depression, anxiety, ocd, anorexia and bulimia, and i was meaning the effects of my anti-depressants and them not working. I apologize for any misunderstanding. I will correct the problem ASAP. I do hope you shall reconsider me. Thank you. Sincerely, sunflowers21573
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