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the man of a simpler time

there's a man in the park singing songs to the trees,
his hair waves slightly in the cool Autumn breeze

he smiles so softly when the birds do reply,
with a song thats so lovely it brings tears to his eyes


never will you see him with a frown on his face,
for he is content in this most tranquil place

crazy they call him but crazy he's not,
he's simply locked in a time the rest have forgot

a time without gangs or rioting violence,
when neighborhood streets were covered in silence

so here's to the man who sings to the trees,
singing the songs of all he foresees









 

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  • Shadow Anonymised gold member
    October 11

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    dustin, sir, i curtsy to this.

    meter, hate. rhyme, hate with a passion.

    this...

    this i love.

    as a spoken word artist, i can see this being performed. as a poet, i can see this being written and published in an anthology. which is brilliant.

    give me more though! its too short..


  • oOHannahListerOo
    September 5

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    Aww

    This poem is kind of sad yet light hearted? I reall like it. It paints a picture in your head. I want to be-friend him! I'll give him hugs. I love it. Great work baby.
    Love
    Hannah
    x x x


  • YouWillBeLoved
    June 19

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    Wow

    This is very professionally written and Id expect to find this in a poetry book!
    Great Job, friend!


  • Sentimentalpoet
    May 29
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    AmAzInG

    WElldone dustin , its great. u really are a good poet. thanks for sharing a wonderful poem with us.


  • Mistress Loken
    May 16

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    the best ive seen so far...for you and this poem i shall post the Old Man...its one close to my heart


  • Andi. gold member
    May 15

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    another simply amazing piece.
    thank you for sharing dusty


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    April 28

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    crazy they call him but crazy he's not,
    he's simply locked in a time the rest have forgot
    Wow to the above line hit me and hit me hard
    Awesome poem
    Gave deep thoughts and reflection
    Loved it
    Julie


  • lost soul of yen
    April 13

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    this is so cool
    is this man u?
    ur poems is better than mine but ill learn


  • Crazychook
    March 12

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    How did I not know how good of a poet you are! Dude, I totally love this one. It just rings of nostalgia and reminiscence, which are two of my favourite things to read about! It's sad but happy at the same time also, which is awesome, and it flows so nicely. I love!!!


  • JulietteArielle
    March 7
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    wooow. i love this!


  • Timeless Wisdom silver member
    November 11, 2008

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    OMG.....there is nothing harsh to say about this !! Truly captivating and awestriking. Bravo...

    I love the metaphorical title...and it reminds me of one of my favorite songs by Wynonna Judd, "Grandpa"...amazingly done my friend...


  • MysticalRayne
    October 3, 2008

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    I adored this piece I could actually see this man and feel for him - but he creates his own piece and is content thank you for sharing


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    September 26, 2008
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    Beautiful Sentiments, Poet!!!

    Thank you for sharing such profound wisdom with all of us!!!


  • TabbyCat
    September 21, 2008

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    you've created a beautiful image here...and on top of that, the flow is smooth and the rhyme unforced.


  • SunDew
    August 6, 2008
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    Hey, I'm in that group, too...."Niaish Ma Eno From All Your Children".

    I could see myself in this poem. Haha, you'd have to change the gender of the man, but, leaving that out, it was like you wrote about me. I love Nature in (nearly) all her beauty; animals & trees & plants & seasons. Most call me crazy when I admire her subjucts & clothing she puts Earth in.

    Awesome write!
    ~Chelle


  • Dark Otter
    June 21, 2008
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    simple and memorable

    We all seem to have forgotten what is important.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    Beautiful write

    So true this is for in todays societry if you are happy and joyous and in love with naturwe they either say your crazy or on drugs .Well their is only one drug for me and that the love of God and all his makings

  • woo
    May 21, 2008
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    perfect


  • blueyez
    May 7, 2008
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    this one almost made me kind of sad. It's true and I often see older people and wonder if they're afraid to come out of their houses because of how scary the world must be to them now with all the madness our generations have brought upon us!


  • GrowlingBear
    March 26, 2008

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    Sweet Memories

    Sweet Memories that this has brought back to me, of times gone by when you did not need to watch your own back.  Such a changed world this has become.  Thank you my friend 


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    February 27, 2008

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    wow this is amazing I love this write Shame to see people these days that treat people wrong like this Gangs need to stop abuse needs to stop and so much more. Parents need to teach there children respect and morals these days. and phrase do unto others as you would want done to you. Niaish for sharing this awesome write


  • Sandygram silver member
    February 23, 2008
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    A stunning poem with so much truth within the words. What happened to those simpler times we could go anywhere and not worry. I wish the children of today could have those joys too. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem. Take care, Sandy


  • anaisnais
    February 23, 2008
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    Niaish Ma eno from all your Children, a beautiful piece to reflect upon - so manyof us should I think get back to thinking and appreciating nature and the earth and activity around us. Some people have more harmony and peace in their lives without clinging to those worldly possessions.

  • PureCountry
    February 23, 2008

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    I Will Never Look

    at another elder sitting in the park, without thinking of your words. You tug at the heart, as we can all relate to this man locked in his own time. Well Done and well said.

    Niaish for sharing!


  • Arizona Sunset
    February 22, 2008

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    beautiful, and sad, love of another human is the greatest gift we can give to the world...blessings always ~ Trisha


  • Shadoe
    February 22, 2008

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    Congrats on the Honorables! This is deserving. Those often disregarded as crazy and such really do sometimes hold the greatest understanding of the world past to the present. I love the representation you have written here. A true delight to read.


  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    Wonderful character sketch of one in tune with nature and not this present violent age. Your poem paints an intriguing image and serves as a reminder that this present age would do well to revert back to simpler days and simpler ways where people respect one another and share in the reverence of nature. Well Done friend. Niaish for sharing.

    Gray Elk


  • LittleMoon silver member
    February 21, 2008
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    Despite this dreadful violent world we live in now, there still are some people who wish to opt out of reality and live their own way, content in their own mind, who is crazy them or us? These words of yours made me think about the ones I have met over the years, not many it's true, but they have something we will never find. Niaish for sharing with us


  • tawk gold member
    February 21, 2008

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    Wow what am amazing write of yesteryear. Such emotion and imagery throughout. I wish for happier times too. Niaish for sharing


  • Sunshine Always
    February 21, 2008

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    How wonderful to live in that very special world of happiness..Far removed from the violence and upheaval of todays ragged design....Loved this.......mal


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    February 21, 2008

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    I love poems about people we really do not know but see and perceive a story from them. Everyone has a story and you did a fantastic job telling the reader his. A great piece of writing.
    Soulful Woman


  • Emile
    February 21, 2008

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    Good

    This poem is innovative, captivating and three dimensional in character. Your words took stage and treated the reader to a glimpse of your imagination as well as your heart.


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    February 21, 2008

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    BREATH TAKING

    What an honor to read such a beautiful piece...you have given life and truth to this wise one who sings...and i love the way you have shown he is in the right for the way he feels...Niaish and much love to you

  • Deluder
    February 20, 2008

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    Touching

    you have very nice flow, and the rhyming was great.
    you really shouldn't judge yourself so harshly, you have skill. It may not be as advanced as you'd like it to be, but we all have room for improvement


  • Servul
    February 20, 2008
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    Wow, I really love this poem its so calm and so uplifting really great job on this one.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    February 17, 2008
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    I would love sometimes to locked myself away from this fuk'd society, go back to a peaceful time, only love & happiness, no pain..

    I really like this, it says a lot, I like how you brang it back to, so heres to the man who sings to the trees...



    Cindy


  • TacoSexyFail
    February 5, 2008

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    wow this is such like a flashback...although im not old enough to know what kind of flashback etc. but you get what i mean

    Once again. I LOVE your rhyming! gah. *takes it from you*


  • second-born
    December 18, 2007

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    WOW...this is such a fantastic poem...I loved its theme and how you've written it with simplicity yet with a profound wisdom...very captivating indeed!!!


  • Candyknife gold member
    November 20, 2007

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    omfg

    emoo this is great , i loved it , the flow , the rhyming , the imagery , with a great message laying with it , brilliantly conceivable !!!
    you have yet to disappoint dusty ,
    great job truly
    ~ ♥ Rena ♥ ~

  • kitkat92
    November 17, 2007
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    very good

    its touching and unique, thanx for entering


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 13, 2007

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    The poem itself is poignant and moving. The presentation makes it really hard for me to concentrate on the work. Good luck in the contest.


  • Mysti1ThroughWitHim
    November 13, 2007
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    I love

    this is a great poem


  • Freestyle Bushido
    November 9, 2007

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    I like the underline message of this piece. going back to that old saying "the pleaurable things in life can befound in the simple things" nice poem. Thank you for entering.


  • SilverMoonFeathers
    November 7, 2007
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    This is very good i like this entire poem if only life were that simple and easy


  • Sean Logue
    November 5, 2007
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    Excellent.

    Like the forgotten element, similarities to my own experience and thoughts, well thought out.

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