Paper

Money's our motivator
Money's the instigator

Money Changes People
Money makes them feeble

Money causes Greed
Money makes people Bleed

Money's worth killin' for
Money rots out the core

Money's the table setter
Money makes us better

All this shit is pretty pathetic
This life ain't very poetic

All the lives that were takin'
Many mistaken

Wrong place wrong time
Right place wrong sign

Money ain't our savior

Its just dirty paper

Author notes

Just me and my randomness

What do you think????

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Romanee
November 7, 2007
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If I'm honest I don't feel that this is one of your best, I still think it's good though, Romanee
endymion
November 5, 2007

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I don't like the forced rhyme. It's just... sloppy and doesn't feel right. You could convey the same message without being forced into a form that doesn't do your ideas justice.

Throughout this poem, you use "moneys" to mean "money is." You need an apostrophe-- thus, "money's the table setter," etc.

--Cris