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He tried not to be
one admired by others,

sought to live
without making ripples on the surface;
his touch had been felt
poured himself into streams of change.

Something within resisted
the shining star.
But the world would not leave,
solitude did not withstand love
of children, friends that learned to
withstand prickly bristles.

So this dark-ling star shone in
lower tones nonetheless, for we
are not invisible;
those touched were warmed
for much had been given to this man;
much lay within.

He blossomed
in love of compassion and giving;
trial by life. And the moments of learning
and teaching became one, a seamless flowing,
knowing and glowing unto eyes.

For we are all in our days the fruit of a tree;
ancestor called lives,
and life feeds us, molds us;

we are the end of a sentence
spoken by time in our living breath.

Author notes

Prompt: " Experience is given to each of us to teach others."

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"Attempting for something means there is a fruit, there is always a fruit."

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  • Asfand
    January 10, 2008

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    Ohh, very nicely done. I liked thsi one alot, the beautiful serenity of the piece and of your words, the imagery and the meaning. strong piece here.


  • tanzanite
    December 9, 2007

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    Are you always this brilliant? Of course you are. This was FANTASTIC work. It absolutely followed what the hosts wanted and I thought you nailed it. I love the reference to loved ones loving us despite us wanting solitude. I love the seamlessness of this and the lovely message of this work of art. Well done.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    November 7, 2007

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    Attemting for something means there is a fruit???

    No, I think that would much rather be seen as the seed... Completing something would give you the chance to enjoy the fruit... [sorry but that is just my opinion!!]

    Lovely poetry!
    He blossomed
    in love of compassion and giving;
    trial by life. And the moments of learning
    and teaching became one, a seamless flowing,
    knowing and glowing unto eyes.

    I also believe you cannot teach what you havent learned!! Lovely!

    Becks

  • JustBreathe gold member
    November 5, 2007

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    "He blossomed
    in love of compassion and giving;
    trial by life. And the moments of learning
    and teaching became one, a seamless flowing"

    Such wonderful poetry in such a heartfelt message. Sometimes, even tho we resist...and try to be un-loved...love finds us anyway thru family and friends (especially children) who ignore our 'prickliness' and love us anyway. And with time and experience, we become wiser -- as a techer and a student -- and begin to truly understand and appreciate the depth and preciousness of the love that is given and received.

    Great write PK. Good luck in the contest ....JB♥

  • Rowan gold member
    November 5, 2007

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    "So this darkling star shone in
    lower tones nontheless, for we
    are not invisible;"

    exceptional penning. Are you always this brilliant?
    sigh.

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