I hold my breath
and become aware;
aware of slowing within my body
of all of life's functions.
It is a reminder,
a reminder of whence I've come
and how I am made,
connected by breath.
Paradise is filled
with this very air
unlimited,
eternal.
I feel you
in my breath
in my being
in my soul,
and I cradle you
as my child
as my lover
as my life
for you are in me as I am in you
Permeated by the atmosphere of Love.
Author notes
Inspired and prompted by: "Lovers don't finally meet somewhere. They're in each other all along."...Rumi
A contest entry
- Lovers... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 6, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think...
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What a lovely poem full of tender images so sweet and so true well done.
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and I cradle you
as my child
as my lover
as my life
for you are in me as I am in you
Permeated by the atmosphere of Love.
The immagery and beauty of love is around
the verse thanks for the beautiful entry in my contest...
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I am so wanting to do this contest, But haven't had a chance to really think on it. Love the title Permeated.
How love passes through us literally. Cute baby too ~ Mykeee
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Appreciate your comments here Michael, and I hope you do join the contest; your writing lends itself well to this subject. Peace to you, Rhonda
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This is absolutely beautiful. It makes me feel such happiness. It is gorgeous the way that you expressed how you feel, in such depth, in so much emotion, it makes my heart tingle, and my eyes wide open, I love this poem, it is sweet and in perfect harmnony!
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Your comment has made my heart tingle too.
Thanks for such warm words. Peace to you, Rhonda
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Powerful!
This has a persuasive power that comes from sincere feelings. I love the way you let your words smooth, though thoughtfully. Favourite lines:
"It is a reminder,
a reminder of whence I've come
and how I am made,
connected by breath"
and,
"for you are in me as I am in you
Permeated by the atmosphere of Love"
Simple superb. Congrats and best regards
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Superb?..
Your comment is too kind, but much appreciated, Jose. I am glad you like it. Peace, Rhonda -
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It was my pleasure! Sorry for the typos, btw.
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Wow... you captured that one... I got the warm fuzzies... I had to watch CNN for a moment to get my balance back, hahaha. Love it.
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lol...glad to see you're keeping up with the worldly stuff...thanks for the comments, they are always an experience. Peace, Rhonda
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