Sunrise burnt through
my closed eyes
veins and deep red
soaked into me
a cacophony of street song
pounding in my
ears
A cab shouts obscene
diesel fumes defame the air
venders’ hawk and street girls walk
the sidewalk breathes and old men talk
a crazy child draws predatory pigeons
on the crumbling tenet walls
with shreds of psychedelic
and psychotic
chalk
Star rise rifles through
my open mouth
tongue and deep black
cut into me
a silence of evensong
soothing in my
mind
A contest entry
- Contradictory by Danna Hobart.
375 points, ended November 13, 2007, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Wow.. this was amazing.
Excellent metaphorical use & brilliant language.
Lovely imagery & original, surreal thoughts.
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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This is fantastic. I don't even know where to begin to praise it. It almost feels like I have read it, or parts of it before, which is something that Keats said it should do, "Poetry should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts, and appear almost a remembrance." The rhyme in the middle adds a nice rhythm to the piece. Thanks for entering.
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eXCELLENT POEM I WISH YOU THE BEST OF LUCK IN THE CONTEST
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