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Love And Hate

Theres more love in this,
then there is hate,
I don't know why I love You,
I guess it's fate.

I love the way you smile,
And the way you hold my heart,
I love the way you laugh,
Even when I'm torn apart,

I hate it when you ignore me,
Even more when your not around,
With out you, It seems hard,
To keep my head above ground,

I've just now realized,
I'm nothing without you,
I need you every day,
Just so I can get threw,

I never thought,
I'd be like this again,
I never thought I'd open up,
And then....


You saved me

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gim65

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  • Puking Faerie Dust gold member
    December 26, 2007

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    This is a pretty sweet testament, and the flow was nice. The rhyme didn't seem forced or anything. The only thing I didn't like about it, was how it reminded me of the poem from the movie 10 Things I Hate About You.
    Good luck in the contest
    Jeanette*~


    • Burnt-Angel
      December 28, 2007
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      thanks for the comment & the luck, and to the ten things i hate about you thing, it's my favorite movie, so yea....


  • whiterabbit.
    December 4, 2007

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    This is so cute and sweet. I really like the genuine raw emotions in this piece. Thanks for entering.


  • Tarja
    November 27, 2007

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    Well... I'm not really sure how this qualifies as a love letter... seems to me like it's another random love poem. I thought that your words were genuine and sweet. However I did want to say that there was a line that didn't win me over so well... didn't seem all too romantic:

    "Theres more love in this,
    then there is hate,
    I don't know why I love You,
    I guess it's fate."

    ... ... Well I would really hope that in a relationship there would be more love than hate... and also I don't think it's altogether... true love when you're not even sure why you love someone. You know?

    Well thanks for the entry, good luck.


    • Burnt-Angel
      November 27, 2007
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      i wrote this right after we hadnt talked in about 6 months... thats why its love and hate


  • Fearful - Death
    November 6, 2007
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    See... You're A Good Writer!
    An Artist In Your Own Way...
    Bravado!

    -YFC-


  • Bite-2-Break-Skin
    November 5, 2007
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    claps!

  • Bite-2-Break-Skin
    November 5, 2007

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    This made me fall on my bed, put my face in the pillow and scream lightly.

    i love you so much.

    Its not shitty. Youre just to hard on yourself.

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