feeling much has lost it's touch
so overwhelmed inside
i cannot cry even though i
have assuredly tried
i could fall and lose it all
and hardly even blink
finding out, without a doubt
i've lost my will to think
so i write into the night
wondering what's wrong
singing past the shattered glass
such a familiar song
Author notes
k SO.. wanna know a little secret about dear old Nov? this is about as far as i normally get when i write a poem..
and i want it to keep going, but i either lose the thought and/or feeling, and keep writing anyway..
i decided not to do that tonight, because i want it to still sound good in the morning..
ka - BLAH!
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Clear. I know the feeling.
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Loved this read.....An awesome write
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Ah-ha
Shards of glass at our feet. Strips of sharp ready for red!
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Wow, it was so... gentle and comfortable. I absolutely adored the last bit. So simple and yet, so refreshing and brilliant.
Kudos, man. Brilliant job!
<3!
Keep writing!
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really beautiful...enjoyed it,esp the last stanza..
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this is amazing, i love the song of this by pink floyd.
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i do feel that the use of the pink floyd song title was too cliche... if you were going to use a pink floyd title you should have at least acknowledged it in your notes or even in your poem as a theme. the poem itself and its meaning is great, but the title just ruined things for me.
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I hope yout title was a tribute to the Pink Floyd song rather than an attempt to rip it off.
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Not attempting to rip it off.
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Agreed.
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Fantastic poem, it has a great flow to it and a great subject! It maybe just me but I did feel like the flow was disrupted in line 10, felt maybe it needed what's changed to what is. I just kinda felt like the line was a syllable short - just a suggestion! Great work, I look forward to reading more of your poems!
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i love this pink floyd song, and i think you have aptly captured the pain both acid-crazed Syd Barret must have felt and many others of us feel. good poem, poet!
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I don't feel is incomplete at all.. I love the flow and all. to me its perfect the way it is... Good job..
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I can feel the pain and emotion here!!! Even if its numb!!! You did a wonderful job portraying this write!! I love the way you express your feelings!! This is fantabulous!!! You did a lovely job!!! I love it!!
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Love how you wove a Floyd song in there; some of their songs including this one are just so poetic, they're striking. I think you should keep it just like this because if you add more into it then it'll just go on and wear down the general idea.
Lovely job
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The title drew me in, as my favorite Floyd song describes a large measure of my life for many years. You have captured a lot of emotion, still using a very engaging rhyme and meter, making a very strong package here. Well done. Calls for a sequel, although hopefully the dpression will not still be around as stimulus.
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i've been here before; goign back a year or two when i suffered from depression. naturally not saying that you suffer from it, but, this is precisely how i felt, and wrote back then .... very well done!
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wonderfully written
Me likey. I nominate for front page.
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