I'm dead inside
And torn outside
I feel no pain
'Cause I'm beaten down
It's not like me
And it's not like you
We rearranged
What could have been true
The moments stopped
I've got to breathe
But I can't
Because I'm hurt
But not in pain
I've been deceived
And now I'm shocked
It's hard to find
That I believed
All the lies
You said to me
I was your friend
You weren't mine
I "scratched your back"
While you stabbed mine
It's not like me
And it's not like you
What's done is done
We've rearranged
And now the hardest
Part of this
Is all the crap
You said to me
"I'll be your friend
Till time goes by,
I'll make you smile
Every time you cry"
Well all that's left
Is nothing now
And though it's me
That has been hurt
I pity you
You missed out on
So fucking much
It's a world of disaster
When you're around
Suck the life out of me
To feel alive
A pretty little vampire
Barren bound
Author notes
I expressed a lot of feeling in this poem, because it actually happened and stuff.. I had a dear dear friend-or so I thought- and she secretly hated me behind my back, but with me she was all "best friendy" and stuff.. I guess she was really a hypocrit.. It may sound a bit stupid (notes, not poem) but what she did to me was HUGE.. Anyways.. I hope you like it..
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wonderful and captivating.
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Excellent job expressing your feelings here.
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Ahhh.!
She's creepy, truly. She gets all friendly and stuff... But I know better! (thanks to you 
) A lovely poem, but I think 'baren' might be spelled incorrectly. Try a spell check (always helps). Also, you might want to take out the swearing (it disrupts the flow). Lovely emotion, truly tangible!
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Thanks... But you could have told me about the swearing thingy when I showed it to you...
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I wasn't really examing it as I am now. Because we know her, it fits really well, and strengthens the poem. But to outsiders, it could look like a tantrum....
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