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The Result of Abnormal Cells on a Pap Test

 

 

 

 

'Here comes the liquid
it will only sting for a few seconds.'



The room before
growled quieter, despite walls
painted in cervical cancer.

 


That night in Calgary
should never have happened. Shit

I can't believe we all have
one-thirty appointments.



Stomach turns from the
twenty-minute stink

of medicine
or disinfectant
or both.


We laugh at the possibility of
his mom walking in, or someone that knows
them.




Why didn't he just say it was vinegar?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • NurseChilly gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    Stacy... Mary said it all.... I can't quite pull the title in with the whole piece.. maybe just a little thing needs to be added to pull it all together more

    something about the event? I dunno

    nevertheless, a very strong write and contender for sure

    G.x


    • J.J. Sass
      November 7, 2007
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      the title - basically, after the results of my test it was determined I had to go see a gynaecologist (why am I unveiling my life story on AP lmao) to ensure that this wasn't leading to cervical cancer. So the whole experience occurred in the office, and I was trying to take my mind off things (with the indented stanzas) due to overwhelming anxiety. :S

      Like I told Mary, thanks for the honesty. Hopefully it's a little clearer now, but I guess the fact that I had to explain doesn't do it so much justice does it? lol


  • Cat
    November 6, 2007

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    that is funny- i assumed the non- religious calgary - heathen that i am..

    i really like this- as i'm sure i've told you before your work has condensed and gotten very solid- i really enjoy reading you- i did think this piece is missing a link or two- a little something extra that needs saying to pull it all together.. of course it could be the drugs talking.

    thanks so much for entering this contest and as always one of the strong entries here

    m

    • J.J. Sass
      November 7, 2007
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      I guess it seems disjointed because of the here and there feeling I had while there. One minute I was so focused on (more like overwhelmed by) the surrounding, next I was trying to relieve some anxiety by thinking on other things, which didn't really help anyway lol.

      Thanks for the honesty.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    November 4, 2007
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    wonderful poem...


    al

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 4, 2007

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    Outstanding imagery,description and delivery.Especially liked the walls painted with cancer...
    Please excuse my rambling,often am just too speechless to do more than smile and applaud but I find my voice with this one...

    • Yvette Champ gold member
      November 4, 2007
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      Bless you for explaining,I edited my comment in case it caused confusion and thankyou again

    • J.J. Sass
      November 4, 2007
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      Thanks so much Yvette. I must point out though, that the Calgary reference was not a religious one, but rather Calgary, Alberta in Canada.

      Thanks again.

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