The hands of time could never move again,
Or withdraw completely from the fabric of life,
Pulled from existence as the day moves on,
Correcting our lives as we grow old together.
Everyone always said we fit together like a puzzle,
In perfect, everlasting harmony,
as everyone around us
seemed to only connect the wrong pieces with themselves.
We were born into this world, 507 days apart,
And yet our spirits are connected,
As if the synchronized beating of our two hearts
Eased the search for the other, now pulsing together forevermore.
And once upon a time, when we were just kids,
You held me without knowing that my heart was beating our rhythm,
And I traced the outline of your lips with my fingertips,
Knowing that they were mine, for the rest of our lives.
We never were the epitome of love,
Yet we tried and tried again,
Until my heart could beat with no one else,
Until time and existence paused to let our love surpass its lifetime.
And in that moment, I swear, we were infinite,
We were inalterable, inevitable,
Your wings painted across the sky of my heart,
My heart kissed by the warmth of your arms.
Hold me and tell me we’ll burn like stars,
We’ll burn as we fall.
Watch as city lights burn for us.
Watch as time waits for us.
Author notes
Credit to Anberlin's Inevitable, A.F.I.'s Kiss and Control, and Stephen Chbosky's The Perks of Being A Wallflower.
Inspired by and dedicated to my muse.
celebrateinfatuate- I added this to your contest because it's my personal favorite, and honestly my best poem so far. Good luck with the contest!
A contest entry
- One Whole Year by Death of the Author.
600 points, ended November 13, 2007, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - One Whole Year: Collection Point C by Death of the Author.
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Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Closing TODAY by Misery into Melody.
670 points, ended December 6, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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I really liked this. It really speaks to me in ways that no other poem ever has. Good luck in the contest.
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thank you so much for your comment!
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Wow this is very personal and it's the detail that makes it so, e.g. 507 days apart.
I really liked this. It's so...I don't even know, it's just good. It got better as it went along too, each stanza building on the foundations of the last.
We never were the epitome of love,
Yet we tried and tried again,
Until my heart could beat with no one else,
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And in that moment, I swear, we were infinite,
We were inalterable, inevitable,
Your wings painted across the sky of my heart,
My heart kissed by the warmth of your arms.
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Hold me and tell me we’ll burn like stars,
Were my favourite lines, they really captured my imagination. It's also Bonfire night tonight here so the falling, burning stars really reminds me of fireworks.
An enjoyable write, thanks for entering and good luck!
Take care x
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WHO's the muse??
This is really really really UN-FUCKING-BELIEVEABLELY good.
Yeah, that good.
Seriously...I think I'm going to play that song repeatedly today...
*wuvgles j000*
good write!
no...strike my last! GREAT WRITE!
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you're my muse. you're my bottomless pit!
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YAY! And you're my acid trip
*wuvgles*
i love that sound, so give me one more line
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Wow.. thats the first thing that came to me Mi-ran you are a wonderfuly amazing poetess, I love this poem, The depth and the feeling just oozes from each word, it jumps out and slaps you in the face, This is amazing:
'And in that moment, I swear, we were infinite,
We were inalterable, inevitable,
Your wings painted across the sky of my heart,
My heart kissed by the warmth of your arms. '
My favorite Stanza, its so beautiful. never stop writing, not ever!
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It's funny... I tried writing a poem about Alex when I thought I loved him... and it turned out as... ew bad. and then I write this one, and I don't even KNOW for sure if I love Chris... And this one ends up as so beautiful... it's amazing really.
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I love this. Great job!
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thanks!
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