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Coming From A Field Of Shattered Hearts

Now boy:
You listen here,
And you better listen real good.
Right now,
You got my Soul Sista's heart
In your sloppy little hands,
And you BETTER not scratch it.
You drop that gem?
BANG.
You're dead.

'Cuz from where I'm standing,
In this field of broken hearts,
You've done enough damage already.

Author notes

Okay, I admit this isn't very good, but it was very very very fun to write. *cackles evily*

Picture #3

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  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    November 14, 2007

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    G'Day Deadly ♥

    I was giggling at this but taking it seriously at the same time.

    The final lines made me stop and think harder. Beautifully penned

    Best of luck in the contest
    Stay safe
    ~Amanda


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 14, 2007

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    Nice Angst!

    You have given picture # 3 of stong, and overwhelming voice. Much anger and revenge flows from your words. From your friends comments, I see much more into your write Good to get these emotions out through poetry....

    "You drop that gem?
    BANG.
    You're dead.

    'Cuz from where I'm standing,
    In this field of broken hearts,
    You've done enough damage already."

    Wow!!! This grab's the reader's attention for sure!
    thank you for your entry and I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
    ~David~


  • tsarina
    November 5, 2007

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    it sounds almost (brain fart i forget his name) ish because of the accent. i like it. i can imagine if u-no-pudding (haha because of his haircut) read this


    • DeadlyTurnip
      November 5, 2007
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      LOL!!! Pudding. Once again, that would be...interesting if he read this.


  • keisha666
    November 5, 2007
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    i liked this. i am going to put it on my page to. but i will make sure not to claim it. LOL


  • riasme
    November 4, 2007

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    THIS IS AWESOME I could so see you grabbing ethan's colllar at select - NOW YOU LISTEN HERE BOY!!! ^-^ lol monday is gonna be fun!! see you tomorrow

    lise


  • eyes2see-wrds2speak
    November 4, 2007
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    it wasn't bad...i think this really good...


  • BonaFidePoet
    November 4, 2007
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    hehe <3 the freaky almost southern accent type thing

    • DeadlyTurnip
      November 4, 2007
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      This was one of my most enjoyable writes EVER. lol.

      Well, I guess that's what I am, a freaky almost-southern girl.

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