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The Good Old Days

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The Good Old Days

I remember, the good old days
When Rock ‘n Roll, was all the craze
We pinned up our hair, danced all night
Did not come home, till morning light

They told us it was just a phase
I remember, the good old days
We bought gas for just a quarter
I was the shy, pastor’s daughter

One night at the submarine race
That was the night, he made first base
I remember, the good old days
I lost my virtue in a blaze

Yet now I sit here, all alone
Waiting for my children to phone
I’m thankful still, in many ways
I remember, the good old days

 

 

 

Author notes

submarine race:  term used for making love in a car parked at the beach
first base: term used for fondling the breasts, perhaps with an open blouse


Quatern:
A Quatern is a sixteen line French form composed of four quatrains.
It has a refrain that is in a different place in each quatrain.
The first line of stanza one is the second line of stanza two, third line of stanza three, and fourth line of stanza four. A quatern has eight syllables per line.
It does not have to be iambic or follow a set rhyme
scheme.
S1 refrain is L1
S2 refrain is L2
S3 refrain is L3
S4 refrain is L4

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  • penman gold member
    November 16, 2007

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    Excellent

    Such a masterful and creative use of form. It flows so effortless through the mind. Congratulations on the gold.


  • February Moon gold member
    November 9, 2007

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    Great form. I like how you took a happier note from the picture, and wrote about memories instead of the sadness or the love. Thank you so much for entering and good luck.
    Chelsea


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 5, 2007
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    The Cat's Meow

    Great rhyme. You must have talked to one of us old folks.lol
    Joe


  • Moodayo-Okohke silver member
    November 5, 2007

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    Now this brings a smile to my face...Shoot I can remember soom of them good ole' days...I do like this one very much...Snappy little beat!

    ~YOUR WARRIOR~

    and Uncle
    Black Crow


  • Desire gold member
    November 5, 2007

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    Oh My!!

    Beautiful piece penned and in fine form
    Love the images You have brought forward and I could not help but smile
    Just imagining her thinking of the good times...
    in a world now that can question the sanity

    Keep that quill dancing Beautiful
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • sunny day
    November 5, 2007

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    This is so beautiful and has a hint of sadness that brought back some painful memories for me. Perfect to form and the rhyming was exceptional, not forced in any way. No matter how you write you always leave me with a smile. The imagery and flow of your work always leave me wanting for more. Quaterns are another of my favorite forms and this one is heavenly. Adding the definitions for those who wouldn't have heard those terms was most definitely a plus to this. Yeah, I did know them, doesn't make me old. LOL Best wishes in the contest with this work of art. The message is the most important part. Thank you for sharing your golden pen with us once again. Love you my friend, Joyce


    • Amera gold member
      November 5, 2007

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      Thanks so much Joyce. When I saw this picture I saw contentment somehow not just old age. Your comments are wonderful I love them and you.


  • HaleyMary
    November 4, 2007

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    Beautiful write, Sis. How wonderful it would be to get to old age and to have such wonderful memories of our life. Wonderful poetic form, as well. Best of luck in the contest.


  • seamaiden
    November 4, 2007

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    We all hope our memories can be this good when we reach old age, if we reach old age. This was a wonderfully written quatern. Your poetic heart sees what others wouldn't when you look at an image. This was beautiful and you brought tears to my eyes with the images of this elderly person reflecting on their years past. Good luck in this contest with such a lovely entry and keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥


  • Pisces Pieces
    November 4, 2007
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    Almost has a bittersweetness to it, although, it could really be interpreted either way. The lines about being alone and waiting for the children to call are what made me most curious for more...

    Awesome imagery, I can see it unfold...back in the 50's...it would have been so cool to be able to experience that knowing what we know now...


  • PerVirtuous
    November 4, 2007

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    Hmmm. Those days must have passed me by. This is delightful. The image is strong and you made it fit the form smoothly and seamlessly.


  • StarEyes
    November 4, 2007

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    Awwwwww, The Good Ole Days.... Sometimes think it would be fun to go back there, but yet, very thankful that I can't go back!! What a great read this one is!! I love it!! You did an outstanding job on this one!!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta

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