~Prices~
climbing ever skyward today
~Increasing~
everything but people's paychecks
~Monetary~
values decreasing everyday
~Working~
we try to survive, each of us
~Complaining~
all we do, yet words never heard
~Anxiety~
which there is too much of today
~Society~
always harping on what we see
~Harboring~
resentment at what we see now
~Speaking~
we tell others how we feel, but
~Politicians~
are the ones to blame 'cause this war
~Covering~
they keep under wraps most of it
~Hoping~
we will just sit by, nothing said
Author notes
A mirrored Sunshine Twist
syllable count
2,8
3,8
4,8
2,8
3,8
4,8
4,8
3,8
2,8
4,8
3,8
2,8
A contest entry
- Amera’s Anniversary Contest by Amera.
25000 points, ended December 4, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This is super good.I never would be able to do something like this.You must have been doing this a long time.It sounded great and was easy to follow.Great job.My hat's off to you and how truely talanted you are.
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Very good indeed
You have captured every edge of this world and lay it out for all to read
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Thanks for the wonderful comment here.
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This is a perfect example at how something so seemingly simple can be incredibly effective.
Beautiful piece, m'dear. Good luck in the contest!
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Packed with Power!!
You covered alot of ground in this one my friend!! Such truths in this piece. Points in the message expressed wonderfully! And I agree with it completely! Great job, Don
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Excellent
What a creative reflection upon life and today. Great poem, best of luck in the contest
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Brilliant!!!!
You captured the world's problems so vividly in this write. The write [form] being that of your own style is very impressive as well. Excellent choice of words showing many emotions and a poem that is profoundly true.
WELL PENNED!
I wish you the very best in this contest. Amera has put us all up on stage to give our best and you have
BRAVO!
David
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I love the form! You've summed up "today's world" in such a well displayed style, it's a shame that the truth within isn't as pretty as your "sunshine twist".
Best of luck in this contest...I'm sure you'll do well! :
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I love this my friend; you know me and form poetry. The fact that this is your own form makes this so special. You have the sum of the worlds problems here in one poem. Well done thank you for a beautiful poem! This stays in my contest.
Love,
Amera
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Wow Increadible
This is a excellent write and the form and layout of this poem in simply Brilliant, yes I do believe you are a winner here. Totays World is a perfect title that is for sure and the first line Prices, perfect, seems as our culture in so into everything you mentioned in your poem. The last line was a brilliant way to end this poem Hoping will just sit by, and nothing be said. I thought this poem hits reality right on the button with so few words yet so well said in a beautiful form of poetry. Thank you for sharing your increadible gift to write Brilliant poetry and wishing you all the best with a gold on this contest. Blessings Kelle Marie, stavykm
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sunshinegirl, This is a form I have not seen before and it is very interesting. You captured the world's problems within your piece and filled it with strong imagery. Thank you for sharing with all of us and best wishes in the contest. Love and God bless, Joyce
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I will have to look into this twist thing looks like fun, Send me a message explaining the way you wrote this and i will try it............joe
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Wowzers!!
A twist to twist the Mind with smiles
Wonderful piece penned and I have got to try it~
Love the form and You keep that quill
dancing Beautiful
Keep on twisting
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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