i shiver with the itch under my flesh
giddy rush like adrenaline in my veins
suicidal downs like a crash
i cant slow down i cant speed up
hands shaking i cant stop my brain
when will it stop
i cry i scream i beg for help
i hate i curse i break things
it hits me like a light
my brain flies like a switch
i go off on the highest high
i cant break this
they pump me full of drugs
they pick apart my brain
theyve strapped me down to beds
theyve stuck needles into my skin
driving me comepletely mad
i cant control my mind
the deepest depression
the most violent anger
the quietest calm
i claw at my skin
i pull at my hair
where is the sanity
medications rain down around me
one after another
downing like candy
im comatose im stuck
emotions i cant control
locked in this mind
rocking back and forth
gripping my head in my hands
when will it stop
im not okay
will the pills make it better
will it break this sickness
will it make me normal
i cant break this
a bipolar ramp
Author notes
bipolar
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- Mental illness....Care to share your insanity? by Clinging-to-Life.
800 points, ended November 15, 2007, 9 entries
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I really like these parts.
i shiver with the itch under my flesh
giddy rush like adrenaline in my veins
suicidal downs like a crash
i cant break this
a bipolar ramp
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Whoa...awesome expression.
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Wow This Is Hard
I'm Bi-Polar too. Good example of how it is when Mental Illness is into a place of insanity. I have felt as this. I'm just grateful there are medication and I do and finally found the ones that work for me. It is so hard, and then to have people understand what you are going through is a nightmare in and of itself. Excellent Write of feelings due to mental illness and sharing the insanity of it!! The title I shiver with the itch under my skin and than the last line I can't break this a Bi-polar ramp. The title polar coaster excellent title. We call ourselves polar bears!! Just got to laugh sometimes it's so hard. I wish you well and good luck in the contest. Blessings Kelle Marie, stavykm
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This is great. The first line was a perfect opening line, it really grabbed me and pulled me into the web of words you have so neatly weaved together. I relate to this because I am also bipolar. I am curious, bipolar 1 or 2? it seems as if you are talking about bipolar 2 considering the fact that you mention a few things about emotions you cant control, and the poem its self sounds like you are speaking of the emotional chaos you struggle with. I can relate to this in many ways, and I thank you for entering this contest. See you in the finalists.
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all i have to say is my life story.
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WOW! This is wonderfully emotive. I like the way the lines seem to undulate like the track on a roller coaster. The line: "medications rain down around me" stuck-out for me. Someone I know who is bipolar said they feel like their "dotor's chemistry set" with all the drugs that get tried on them.
Great write.
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