I made a choice one day
That I would allow it to all come out
I didn't have a clue what to say
And all that followed me was drought
I thought that something good
Could maybe come out of it all
But all I ever heard
Was the howl of the wolf's call
For me to be left alone
With no friends by my side
I felt like a broken stone
My heart and soul about to collide
All this because of choices I made
I wonder if I ever will be happy one day
November 3, Made For A Contest, 2007
A contest entry
- November New Member Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended December 7, 2007, 83 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I need.... poems.. by Amorous Arms.
450 points, ended November 17, 2007, 63 entries
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425 points, ended December 15, 2007, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Welcome to Allpoetry and thank you for entering
This is a sad piece. It shows that people can sometimes let us down when we don't want them to, and yet we expect it often.
Thank you for entering and good luck
Faerie
Site Greeter -
Thanks for entering and welcome to allpeotry
Sometimes the choices that we make hurt us more than we think. We wish we could take them back but they cannot be undone once they are taken.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy
Site Greeter
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Indeed the choices we make can be a real burden to us. This has a good message. I especially liked the line "I felt like a broken stone"
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I really liked this!
But no opition number or your name!
My favorite part was
For me to be left alone
With no friends by my side
I felt like a broken stone
My heart and soul about to collide
Great job!
Annnnd Good luck in my contest!
-Erin -
Thanks for entering
It is hard when we make choices that allienate our friends but then you have to wonder if they were really your friends because a real friend will stand by you no matter what.
Great write.
Good luck - let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
Welcome to All Poetry
A very emotional piece. You have come out and admitted the choices you have made and that's a good thing. What comes from here is up to those around you. Those you thought were friends obviosly aren't, so you're best to find that out now rather than later.
All the best to you and thank you for entering this in our contest
Gaylene
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You should work on this poem and the flow and rhythem you have a promising write here, ust needs a bit of work read it out loud each line and you will find words that will bring it together.
I thought that something good
Could maybe come out of it all
"I thought maybe something good,
could come about." as an example.
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Thanks for your entry :] (for the Greeters contest)
G'day mattpak5596
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Very strong emotional write Matt.
Heart-breaking images are formed in the readers mind with this.
I hope things only improve for you
Best of luck to you in the contest
Welcome to AllPoetry
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Rather sad I find but you're being honest with yourself which is a good thing. Sorry you ended up feeling this way. Hopefully things will be better next time; don't give up. Good job.
Brian
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