Somewhere in these dark wet streets
I know your face reflects in them
Cold to the touch, hard on the eyes;
A heart broken, your left alone and condemned.
Frozen street lights, racing cars around,
But all I see is the darkness of the rain
As I search the stone faces of the street,
Scanning for your eyes, feeling all your pain.
Deep in the emptiness of my stomach I feel you.
The lump in my throat tells me you're here,
Though finding you is probably impossible.
The emptiness you've left in me will not steer.
In my exhausted breath, the chilled air stabs me.
Pull me out of this nightmare, this dark dream
Where all the faces looking at me are blank;
No expression, only dead eyes looking to redeem.
Splashing footsteps ring loud in my ear;
Echoes of your cry sting my brain in anguish
Yet I cannot see where you are; where you lay.
Why does my pain make me feel so foolish?
Tears and rain collect on my broken face
Reflecting all the years of torment.
Wind pushing against the wings of hope,
Throwing pebbles at my glass house.
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Author notes
this was written to the music by the counting crows, "colorblind" (NOT the lyrics, more or less the piano). It set the tone for me as I wrote my heart.
here's the song, if you're interested in hearing what I heard as I wrote this piece: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y0s7ycdUcHk
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This is very sad and haunting. I know how you mean though searching for someone, but maybe not wanting to find them [thats how I took it anyway]. I've found myself in that position quite recently actually.
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Tears and rain collect on my broken face
Reflecting all the years of torment.
Wind pushing against the wings of hope,
Throwing pebbles at my glass house.
I love the immagery part and the essence of it which is describing the pain in the heart which has come quite powerful in terms..a great heartfelt write is here...
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Great poem. I could feel your pain, as you told it with heartbroken emotion. Very good. My first impression was inner anguish, loneliness, torment. Only certain poems can make people feel that way. Amazing. Thank you for that
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wow. i loved it. i thought it was very emotional, and heartfelt. the emotion just seemed to pour out of this poem.
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This is really good. I love every line. It's so deep and full of emotion. Great write.
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What a strong and honest read
I am going through something personal and this stanza speak truth so load .................joe
Deep in the emptiness of my stomach I feel you.
The lump in my throat tells me you're here,
Though finding you is probably impossible.
The emptiness you've left in me will not steer.
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Of all the people I know, you're the one most deserving of s.
I'm trying so hard to find words to form sentences...to say something meaningful. I guess you have me speechless.
Dark wet steets, cold touch, hard on the eyes
, alone, condemned, pain. Like a page out of my life, although I know it's not. Our views are twisted...
Perhaps though...we are just having a similar dream.
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