I knew your eyes before I knew my own
Your smile, before we ever met.
I used to draw you
On the margins of papers and fast-food napkins
The features would vary,
But your eyes stayed the same.
I spent a long time looking,
in the eyes of other men
Searching for that glimmer
in the depths of those orbs.
I saw wistfulness, sadness,
joy, adoration
I found fire,
I found passion,
but nothing that could match
those eyes I knew without knowing
The ones I knew but had never seen.
I always knew that when I found you
It would hit me like a brick...
We both knew it without saying,
from the moment we met.
Those little crinkles at the corners of your smiling eyes--
shining bright, they looked within me
a reflection of mine.
A contest entry
- Lovers... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended November 6, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Can You Describe Your Love? by DancingQueenAngi.
425 points, ended November 9, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I loved the line about drawing in the margins and fast food napkins...I have done this myself several times. Beautiful write with great imagery.
Good luck in my contest!
Angi -
Oh this is just lovely. I couldn't have said it better, even though I entered this contest myself. I related wholeheartedly. Best of luck in the contest. Definitely worthy of a trophy.
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thank you, I'll be sure to see what you entered also!
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wow!!! this is amazing!!!
Good luck in the contest!!
Surely you will walk away with the trophy!!
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thank you so much!
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bravo
A neat and nifty concept for a poem...very ably and very deftly done throughtout... bravo... bravo... bravo...
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thank you!
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Those little crinkles at the corners of your smiling eyes--
shining bright, they looked within me
a reflection of mine.
The immagery is strongly knitted and love is around the verse which is indeed very intriguing as well..thanks for the beautiful entry in my contest...
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Is he real? DId You actually find those eyes?
Your piece overwhelms me. I can't find words to express my thoughts about it...Congratulations...Mat
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That, Mat Larkin, is an excellent question. Time will tell, I believe.
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