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Soulmates

Many years have passed yet my mind still reflects,
the first time that we met.
The eye contact was seduction at first glance,
a slight familiarity as you took my hand.

Electricity shocking my body,

bolts of lightening in my heart.

There was never a question of if we loved,

it was known we always had.

No words could exchange the volume of velocity,

that  intensified our ecstasy.

It was as if we had known each other all of our life.

Just waiting for time to light our torch,

and unite our vast minds .

For from that day on,

we knew the true meaning of soul mates.

 

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point out grammar usage please

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  • Sean Logue
    November 6, 2007
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    It's pumped.

    Thee hast my heart M'lady, I canst see unto thy soul.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 6, 2007
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    Just waiting for time to light our torch,

    and unite our vast minds .

    For from that day on,

    we knew the true meaning of soul mates.

    A feeling of the meaning of love is around the verse and very intraiguing as well..thanks for the beautiful entry in my contest...




  • penman gold member
    November 5, 2007
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    Excellent

    Wonderful poem for the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.


  • volcaniclastic
    November 4, 2007
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    Nice interpretation. Soulmates are rare indeed.


  • TheClimb
    November 4, 2007
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    This was beautiful and wonderful way of expressing yourself!


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    November 4, 2007

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    A beautiful expression of love. These feelings are so real. A great job with this write..
    Thank you for sharing.
    Soulful Woman


  • DrunkenRam
    November 4, 2007

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    Guilty Dammit

    I noticed that you wanted people to point out grammar usage, wellll: I did happen to notice that you used grammar, in fact it appears that you used grammar quite often throughout this poem, What I cant believe is how you so blatantly splattered grammar all over the page with absolutely no reservation at all, its as if you were flaunting your grammar, kinda like lifting your skirt in public, unabashed, You should be ashamed of yourself.
    Grammar slut!

    Seriously: I like this poem a lot, it seems to be about someone you love very much.


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    November 4, 2007
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    great one

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