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Under the dim lights

 

Under the dim lights..

My spirit was left aside
Lost between dreams and reality
I found the voyeur of the night
Just another solitary soul
Living in a bundle of despair,
fighting its enemy ..
Asking will it ever be over soon?
Words are not able to express how I feel..
I only begin to comprehend my existence
I only know that my life now
will never be the same ..
The happiness I have inside
from walking into your life for a reason
to dry those tears, give you hopes again
and  show you how wonderful life can be
by simply whispering into your ears
sweet caring words that only souls
that have been fighting for life
for so long can understand..

Author notes

"Lovers don't finally meet somewhere. They're in each other all along." ...Rumi

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  • Cannonsfire
    January 17

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    This is well deserving of a gold, it's as if you chanelled Rumi himself with these words, Again it is stunning with it's message within it of having compassion, giving that compassion to others to allow them to live and love. A beautiful piece. C

  • mrme gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    Wow. This is very deep. Everytime I read it, I discover new meaning in your words. And that doesn't occur too often in poems I read. I enjoy that. It says something when you can entice a reader to read a poem over and over because they can't help but feel that they have missed something and want to make sure that they feel they've captured the true meaning of what the author was trying to convey. I enjoyed reading this work. I found the first half of the poem especially creative and enjoyed the imagery that your words painted in my mind.
    Congratulations on your gold.

    • Amarige
      November 7, 2007
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      Your lovely words means a lot to me..Thank you


  • Quiet places
    November 6, 2007
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    Outstanding!!

    Love the whole concept of this poem!! You have penned it perfectly to intensify the way your readers feel it. A well said theme also my dear! The piece reflects it well. I enjoyed every word utterd in harmony with the last line and how true it is. Great job!! Don


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    November 6, 2007

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    sweet caring words that only souls
    that have been fighting for life
    for so long can understand..



    I really love the beauty of the loving heart here..well done..and thanks for the so wonderful entry in my contest....


  • Play Pretend.
    November 5, 2007
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    Good Job, this is nice.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    November 5, 2007

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    This is just such a gentle write, the softness is just superb, well done and goodluck in your contest

    Karen


  • pearl-dragon
    November 4, 2007

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    Your words reached out to me like the caress of a gentle hand. You have such a beautiful way of expressing your feelings. My best wishes to you in this contest.

    Margaret


  • goat1826
    November 4, 2007
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    well written, I like it


  • jacbgd2 gold member
    November 4, 2007

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    How extremely well written!!!!  This is my favorite kind of poem...... void caps, void puncts and no rhyme.... I only wish I could write this way all the time.... You seem to blessed with this gift!!!!!! I love this expressive piece of art..... Be blessed in this contest!

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