The wings of love are flawless,
Gently moving to the sound of the wind.
Gather my family for a peaceful time for a picnic.
It was the perfect day for a picnic,
sun was out,
birds were chirping as they flew around us in circles.
We watched the clouds,
which looked like animals.
So beautiful.
The spark between my family on this day was wonderful.
Munching the fruit and the cinnamon buns under the oak tree.
Maybe it was all a dream......
So it was.
A contest entry
- april rain by spine.
650 points, ended November 8, 2007, 15 entries
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very graceful and dreamy
I love this.
thank you for entering, best of luck in the contest! -
GAH this is so pretty! God I absolutely love your writing, its all so pure and dreamy. This one I am in love with literally, its like so peaceful.
Everything just seems so off somewhere else just speaking quietly to me. My favorite part is definately:
We watched the clouds,
which looked like animals.
So beautiful.
I just love the attitude and flow you have in it. And also I thought the repeat of the word picnic was PERFECT, I don't know why it just made it awkward and poetic. I am in love with this, it is heavenly!
o.0♥!
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I don't think that "Wings of love" is a suitable title for this poem - it's usualy used when talking about love beetween two people. So the title is quite misleading, as I found out to my expense
sorry to hear it wasn't true, it was a beatyfull poem up to that point. sorry if I'm too critical, it's just me. good write ^^
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Maybe it was all a dream......So it was.
Now that’s sad. It sounds like someone longing for a normal, loving family life like so many of us never really see. Poignant, clear picture.
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lovely
nice rendition of a family love feeling . . like "The wings of love are flawless" and "The spark between my family on this day was wonderful" . . good luck in the contest . . good write !!
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