Its happening everyday
Your hand reaches out
And traces its gentle fingers
Around my heart
Caressing it like a wedding band
I didn’t need anyone before
I was my own life line then
Today we both lie within
A rough edged circle
Whose perfection and beauty
Only our eyes can see
Hold me a little tighter
Don’t ever let go
Let your smiles keep lingering
On your sweet lips
Kiss me into the silence
And feel our initials
Etch deep into skin
As each day my soul fits more snugly
Than the last
Into our perfect circle
…Your hands
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- Broken Stories and Abnormal Cliches by Dirty and Broken.
2400 points, ended November 29, 2007, 26 entries
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"And traces its gentle fingers
around my heart
Caressing it like a wedding band."
"And feel our initials
etch deep into skin"
I liked those two verses the most. Your poem was free of cliche, but full of metaphor and I enjoyed reading it very much. The flow was very smooth and perfect for creating a lovely atmosphere.
Bravo, bon amie!
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merci beaucoup! ... tu es tres gentil
... soz m a lil bit rusty... in my french lol... 
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Wow this is a very beautiful piece. I'm glad I've gotten the pleasure of reading this. Such vivid imagery.
"Let your smiles keep lingering
On your sweet lips
Kiss me into the silence
And feel our initials
Etch deep into skin"
Very well done piece.
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thank you!
im glad u enjoyed it.
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beautiful =)
great job mate
seej
(sorry it's not a better comment i just don't know what else to say)
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... dats k.... lol. thanx!!
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As each day my soul fits more snugly
Than the last
Into our perfect circle
…Your hands
how wonderful it would be to have this in my life. you are indeed a blessed soul to have found this. thank you for sharing a bit of you with me through this wonderful write. i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie -
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yes i am indeed very lucky .. and im greatful for it every minute of every day. thank u so much for commenting... im glad you enjoyed it! have a nice day.
wine-red
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Beautiful
This was beautifully written and wonderfully sweet! Love's unending promise, such a beautiful thing!
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thank you so much .. im glad you enjoyed the read!
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Certainly a perfect circle you write about in these lines - easy to read and understand what you are saying here. Lovely images created through your words - good flow and lovely read.
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thank you!!!
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NIce
This was calm and beautiful exquisitly written. I picture myself on a grassy plain watching the animals play relaxing with a blanket and my sweetie for a picnic lunch and him reading to me I enjoy the feel of your write it great keep penning thank you for sharing peace and blessings. -
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thank you so much!!!! im truly glad you liked it.
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