Eyes wide open
And smiling
The portals
You view the world with
Shine
Your soul awakened
Guides you
Silver path beneath your feet
Protects you
From the demons of youth
Milestone reached
You shed the residual angst
Of teenage years
And the growing pains
Of young adulthood
Free and untethered
From the pains of growth
All eyes upon you
The world stops
For just one day
To watch you blossom
In a list
A contest entry
- Lasts just today by Rita Krocha.
600 points, ended November 5, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre-writes Only....Give me your 25th poem by PurpleSky.
475 points, ended June 3, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Very well said With beautiful flow and lovely imagry. Good luck in the contest and congrats on the honorable mention
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Beautiful. Makes you think about things...very well written. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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sounds like it is or would be a nice birthday poem. This was well done and I love your word usage in this piece. Thank you so much for taking the time to enter my contest and best wishes to you!
huggles
Lena -
Great imagery, i cna really relate to this poem because it leaves off pretty much where i am currently at in my life. Keep up the good work =)
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Takes me from here to there.....
And when I reach the last line it makes me feel something I don't usually get to feel. Love the last line "....to watch you blossom" It's massive. Thank You for entering!!!
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an interesting look at a milestone age, looking back, it certainly was a time of change for myself...an enjoyable read. Well done.
Rory
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