Running fields of meadow grass
from shade forest trees we pass
holding hands our hearts apart
nature brings love, our fresh start.
Ocean waves break on coastal rock
in their mist our arms interlock
looking in your eyes so blue
I see my dreams passion in you.
Sun setting in distant clouds
over oceans tangerine shrouds
your hair blowing with cool breeze
loves melody singing through the trees.
My fingers caress your cheeks
softly your love my heart seeks
slow and tender our lips meet
kissing you my heart skips a beat.
Sun sinking into the sea
feelings stirring in you and me
we saunter together arm in arm
fire rekindled with passion and charm.
Your very touch makes me shake
hips brushing every step we take
your smile takes my breath away
in my heart,
I know,
my love for you,
will always stay.
Author notes
A husband and wife, love forevermore.
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A contest entry
- Let Me Feel Romanced by stavykm.
800 points, ended November 14, 2007, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You won bronze, Thank you for entering. I really enjoyed this write, see you in the next contest. Blessings stavykm
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Compliments on the beauty, imagery and nature's reflection through this love poem..I wish you well in the contest!
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Very Nice and Romantic
What a beautiful poem for me to hear. The title Holding Love Through The Years and the first line Running frields of meadow grass, oh how fun, to actually play and run through the meado grass so awesome and than the last line my love for you, will always stay. Very nice this poem ok than the second stanze Ocean waves break on coastal rock and than the third stanza Sun setting in distant clouds. Brought nature into this very romantic to me, I love this whole poem I could keep rambling on but I won't, you definitly captured a Godly romance of innocence, yet passionately as well. Thank you for entering our contest, and good luck, Kelle Marie, stavykm and Christina
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"Sun setting in distant clouds
over oceans tangerine shrouds
your hair blowing with cool breeze
loves melody singing through the trees."
Very nice use of metaphor and or simile, very nice sentiments, just one little thing though, the rhyming scheme is a little too tight for my taste, but altogether, a wonderful hearts labor.
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Romance is in the air....
Well the contest request was for romance and i think you nailed this in more ways than one HH
you have us walking the journey watching far enough away yet close enough to feel the rapture of the emotions. You pen well from the heart with ease of flow and descriptive emotions of what love truly can be between two people. Plus imagery to set the ambience of the atmosphere to soft light and romantic Very nicely crafted Good luck in the contest. Your just been bookmarked.
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